Band 6.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer
Overall Band Score: 6.0 · Cambridge IELTS 20 · 2026-08-13
IELTS Writing Task 1 question
The charts below give information about a public library in a town called Little Chalfont.
Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
Student answer (Band 6.0)
The given pie chart and graph illustrate data about Little Chalfont Library.
Overall, It was evident that adults were the highest users of this library with children being the second. Additionally, total loans were given mostly for adult and child fiction genres while the figure for it showed fluctuations though it was mostly steady.
The pie chart and the table showed the people aged from 18-64 were the highest regular visitors (51%) and the children were second most visitors (22%) as it was approximately 73% of the total members. Conversely, the young adults and the elderly were low in percentage(15% and 12%, respectively) which was merely 27% of the whole proportion.
The graph showed no dramatic increment though the highest number was marked at roughly more than 20,000. The amount started off with more than 15,000 in 2007 then rose slightly over 20,000 from the year 2010 to 2012. Moreover, after 2012 the loan amount dipped to less than 20,000 before it crossed 20,000 from year 2014 to 2016 which was almost the same as 2010 to 2012.
AI examiner evaluation
| Criterion | Band |
|---|---|
| Task Achievement / Task Response | 6.0 |
| Coherence and Cohesion | 6.5 |
| Lexical Resource | 5.5 |
| Grammatical Range and Accuracy | 5.5 |
| Overall | 6.0 |
Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 6.0
The response covers all parts of the task by summarizing the main features of both the pie chart and the line graph. You successfully identified the key demographic groups and the overall trend in library loans. However, the analysis could be improved by making more direct comparisons between the data sets. For instance, you mention the loan figures showed fluctuations, but you do not explicitly link these to the demographic data provided. Additionally, the description of the graph is slightly repetitive in its focus on the '20,000' mark. To reach a higher band, ensure that the most significant trends are highlighted with more precision and that the relationship between the two charts is explored more deeply.
Coherence and Cohesion — Band 6.5
The response is logically organized into clear paragraphs, with an introduction, an overview, and two body paragraphs. The use of cohesive devices such as 'Additionally', 'Conversely', and 'Moreover' helps to guide the reader through the information. However, some transitions feel slightly mechanical, and the referencing is occasionally imprecise, such as in the phrase 'the figure for it showed fluctuations', where 'it' is ambiguous. Improving the flow between sentences and ensuring that pronouns clearly refer to their antecedents would enhance the overall coherence of the report.
Lexical Resource — Band 5.5
You demonstrate an adequate range of vocabulary for the task, using terms like 'fluctuations', 'proportion', and 'dramatic increment'. There are some minor inaccuracies in word choice, such as 'the figure for it showed fluctuations' and 'the children were second most visitors', which should be 'the second most frequent visitors'. While the vocabulary is sufficient to convey the meaning clearly, it lacks the sophistication and precision required for higher bands. Incorporating more varied collocations and precise terminology related to data reporting would strengthen this area.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 5.5
The response uses a mix of simple and complex sentence structures. While the meaning is generally clear, there are several grammatical errors, such as 'It was evident that adults were the highest users' (unnecessary capitalization of 'It'), and 'the people aged from 18-64 were the highest regular visitors' (missing 'those'). There are also minor issues with article usage and prepositional phrases. Despite these errors, they do not impede communication. To improve, focus on refining subject-verb agreement and ensuring consistent punctuation throughout your writing.
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