Band 4.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer
Overall Band Score: 4.0 · Cambridge IELTS 20 · 2026-08-13
IELTS Writing Task 1 question
The charts below give information about a public library in a town called Little Chalfont.
Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
Student answer (Band 4.0)
Firs of all i would like to thanks to you for giving me the opertunity to write a report about chalfont Library. This report is shoing a graph of total numbers of loans and years, report have data from 2007 to 2016 and 0 member to 25000 members data during given time periord.
there is a table that is shoing total loans by category for 2016 and there is also a circular diagram that is shoing age of library members for 2016. in 2016 the member of libraries are 51% who are adults and have age between 18 yeasr to 64 year, 12% are adults who have over 65, 22% childern and 15% young adults who have age between 13 year to 17 years.
table is showing loans percentage by category
38% childerns get loans for ficition, 6% childern get loans for non-fiction, 1% chilren's get loan for DVDs, 2% young adults, 38% adult fiction, 13% adult non fiction and 2% adult audio books
AI examiner evaluation
| Criterion | Band |
|---|---|
| Task Achievement / Task Response | 4.0 |
| Coherence and Cohesion | 4.0 |
| Lexical Resource | 4.0 |
| Grammatical Range and Accuracy | 4.0 |
| Overall | 4.0 |
Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 4.0
The response fails to adequately summarise the main features or make meaningful comparisons. The introduction includes unnecessary conversational filler ('Firs of all i would like to thanks to you'), which is inappropriate for an academic report. The description of the data is largely a list of figures rather than an analytical summary. Key trends, such as the overall increase or decrease in loans over the decade, are completely ignored. The report lacks a clear overview, which is a requirement for a high band score. The data provided is presented in a fragmented manner, making it difficult to identify the most significant information.
Coherence and Cohesion — Band 4.0
The response lacks logical progression. Paragraphing is poor, with the second paragraph being a disorganized list of statistics rather than a coherent analysis. There is a lack of cohesive devices to link ideas; the text relies on repetitive sentence structures like 'there is a table that is shoing' and 'table is showing'. The absence of transition words makes the report feel like a series of disconnected statements rather than a cohesive summary. The referencing is also unclear, as the connection between the different charts is not established.
Lexical Resource — Band 4.0
The vocabulary is very basic and repetitive. Words like 'shoing' (misspelling of showing) and 'get loans' are used repeatedly. There is no attempt to use academic vocabulary or synonyms to describe trends (e.g., 'fluctuated', 'peaked', 'accounted for'). Spelling errors are frequent, such as 'Firs', 'opertunity', 'periord', and 'childerns'. The range of vocabulary is insufficient to convey the information with any degree of precision or academic tone, which limits the score significantly.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 4.0
The response contains frequent grammatical errors that often impede clarity. There are significant issues with subject-verb agreement ('member of libraries are 51%'), article usage, and sentence construction. The text consists mostly of simple sentences with little attempt at complex structures. Punctuation is also inconsistent, with missing capital letters at the start of sentences and incorrect usage of commas. The lack of control over basic grammar, combined with the high frequency of errors, makes the writing difficult to follow.
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