Band 5.5 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 5.5 · Cambridge IELTS 20 · 2026-08-13

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

The charts below give information about a public library in a town called Little Chalfont.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

 

Student answer (Band 5.5)

LITTLE CHALFONT IS A SMALL TOWN AND HAS LIBRARY IN IT. IT PROVIDES 3 DIFFERENT GRAPHS WHICH WE CAN ELABRATE ONE BY ONE.

SO, FIRST ONE IS PIE CHART WHICH DISTRUBATED AGE CATAGORIES OF MEMBERS IN 4 DIFFERENT GROUPS.THE LARGER AMOUT OF PORTION WAS TAKEN BY ADULTS 18-64 AGE RANGE. HOWEVER, OTHER THREE CATEGORIES TOOK APPROX 50%.

THE TABLE CHART ILLUSTRATES TOTAL LOANS WERE TAKEN BY CATEGORY IN YEAR 2016. ADULT AND CHILDREN'S FICTION WERE 38% SO AS YOUNG ADULT AND ADULT AUDIO BOOKS WERE ONLY 2%.WHERE AS CHILDREN'S NON-FICTION AND ADULT NON-FICTION WERE 6% AND 13% RESPECTIVILY. 1% FOR CHILDREN'S DVDS WHICH WAS THE SMALLEST CATEGORY.

THE BAR CHART REPRESENTS TOTAL NUMBER OF LOANS IN EACH YEAR BETWEEN [redacted phone]. AROUND 15000 WAS THE LOWEST NUMBER IN YEAR 2007. IN 2008 AND 2009 THERE WERE MINOR CHANGED IN NUMBER. WHILE IN [redacted phone] LOANS WERE INCREASED AND REACHED ABOVE 20000. IN YEAR 2013 IT WAS AGAIN SIGHTLY DISCREASED. WHERE IN [redacted phone] AMOUNT OF LOANS GRADUALLY INCREASED.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 5.5

The response covers all three charts, but the analysis is somewhat superficial. While you identify the main features, such as the age distribution and the loan trends, the comparisons are limited. For instance, you list the percentages in the table without highlighting the significant contrast between the most popular category (Adult Fiction) and the least popular (Children's DVDs). To reach a higher band, ensure you synthesize the data rather than just listing figures. The introduction is also slightly informal and lacks a clear overview of the trends, which is essential for Task 1.

Coherence and Cohesion — Band 6.0

The response is organized into paragraphs, which helps the reader follow the structure. However, the use of cohesive devices is mechanical and sometimes repetitive (e.g., 'First one is', 'The table chart illustrates'). There is a lack of sophisticated linking words to connect ideas within and between sentences. The transition between the description of the pie chart and the table is abrupt. Improving the variety of transition signals and ensuring that each paragraph has a clear topic sentence would significantly improve the flow of your writing.

Lexical Resource — Band 5.5

The vocabulary is adequate for the task but lacks precision and variety. You rely on basic verbs like 'taken' and 'represents'. There are also several spelling errors, such as 'distrubated', 'catagories', 'amout', 'respectivily', and 'discreased'. These errors are noticeable and detract from the professional tone required for an Academic Task 1 response. To improve, focus on using more precise reporting verbs (e.g., 'accounted for', 'fluctuated', 'witnessed') and ensure you proofread your work to eliminate basic spelling mistakes.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 5.5

The response contains a mix of simple and some complex sentence structures, but there are frequent grammatical errors. Issues include missing articles ('has library in it'), incorrect verb forms ('loans were taken by category'), and awkward phrasing ('minor changed in number'). Punctuation is also inconsistent, particularly with spacing after periods. While the meaning is generally clear, these persistent errors in basic grammar and sentence construction prevent the response from reaching a higher band. Focus on subject-verb agreement and consistent use of articles.

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