Band 6.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer
Overall Band Score: 6.0 · Cambridge IELTS 20 · 2026-08-14
IELTS Writing Task 1 question
The charts below give information about a public library in a town called Little Chalfont.
Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
Student answer (Band 6.0)
The charts illustrates the data about a community library in a town called little chalfont.
Overall, age of 18-64 are the one who are mostly.
Overall, the largest members of library was 18-64 with 51%. After that childrens were the second highest member of library with 22.1 of membership. Young adults age of 13-17 had 15.1% involvement in the library, whereas adults 65 and over had only 12.1%.
The table depicts the total loans taken by library for different category in 2016. Loan taken for children's fiction and adult fiction had same percentage at 38%. Loans for children's non fiction and adult non fiction was at 6% and 13% respectively. Children's DVDs, Young adults and adult audio books had only 1%, 2% and 2% of proportions respectively.
The bar chart shows the total number of loans from 2007 to 2016. In 2007, around 18000 loans were taken for library, but in 2008 and 2009 it remained same approximately at 18000. By 2010 and 2011, it reached just above 20,000. In 2013
it slightly dipped above 20,000. However it
increased gradually over the three year of period,
hovering above 20,000.
AI examiner evaluation
| Criterion | Band |
|---|---|
| Task Achievement / Task Response | 6.0 |
| Coherence and Cohesion | 6.0 |
| Lexical Resource | 5.5 |
| Grammatical Range and Accuracy | 5.5 |
| Overall | 6.0 |
Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 6.0
The response covers all parts of the task by summarizing the three charts provided. You have successfully identified the main features, such as the dominant age group (18-64) and the loan distribution. However, the analysis is somewhat mechanical and lacks a cohesive overview that synthesizes the data. For instance, the 'Overall' statements are repetitive and grammatically weak. To improve, ensure your overview highlights the most significant trends across all charts rather than just listing facts. While you have included data points, the comparison between categories could be more analytical, focusing on the relationship between membership demographics and loan preferences.
Coherence and Cohesion — Band 6.0
The essay is organized into logical paragraphs, which helps the reader follow the structure. However, the use of cohesive devices is somewhat basic and repetitive. Phrases like 'After that' and 'The table depicts' are functional but lack variety. Additionally, the transition between the overview and the body paragraphs is abrupt. The referencing is occasionally unclear, such as in the sentence 'the largest members of library was 18-64', where the subject-verb agreement and phrasing hinder the flow. Improving the use of linking words (e.g., 'consequently', 'in contrast', 'furthermore') would enhance the logical progression of your ideas.
Lexical Resource — Band 5.5
The vocabulary is generally adequate for the task but lacks the precision required for higher bands. You rely on simple descriptors like 'highest' and 'same percentage'. There are also some awkward collocations and word choices, such as 'total loans taken by library for different category' and 'proportions respectively'. To reach a higher band, you should incorporate more sophisticated vocabulary related to data description, such as 'predominant', 'accounted for', 'fluctuated', or 'a significant proportion'. Spelling is generally accurate, but the lack of capitalization for proper nouns like 'Little Chalfont' is a noticeable error.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 5.5
The response contains a mix of simple and complex sentence structures, but there are frequent grammatical errors that occasionally impede clarity. Examples include subject-verb agreement issues ('The charts illustrates', 'the largest members... was'), incorrect article usage ('the library' vs 'a library'), and awkward phrasing ('age of 18-64 are the one who are mostly'). Punctuation is generally acceptable, but the sentence structure in the final paragraph is fragmented. To improve, focus on mastering basic subject-verb agreement and ensuring that your complex sentences are constructed accurately without losing the main point.
See this exact question answered at other band scores — the same prompt compared across bands.
Browse more IELTS Writing model answers or get your own writing scored by the same AI examiner.