Band 6.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 6.0 · Cambridge IELTS 20 · 2026-08-14

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

The charts below give information about a public library in a town called Little Chalfont.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

 

Student answer (Band 6.0)

The graphical representation provides details about the public library in a Town named Little Chalfont. The pie chart and table depict the age of library members and total loans during the year 2016. Whereas the bar graph represents the total counts of loans from the year [redacted phone].

The circular chart represents that the largest portion was covered by the adults aged 18-64, which accounts for 51%. The proportion of children was 22%. Moreover, the younger adults covered the 15% and the smallest portion was occupied by adults of age 65 and above. Then, the tabular chart states that children's fiction and adult fiction has taken the maximum loans, which accounts for 38%. Children' non-fiction and adult non-fiction taken the loan of 6% and 38% respectively. Whereas the lowest proportion of loan was taken by Children' DVD, young adults and adults audio books which stands between 1-2% only.

Moving further, the bar graph shows that in 2007, 16000 loans were taken. The loans taken during 2008 and 2009 was exactly the same, which inclined to 21000 loans by 2010. In 2011, there was an insignificant change in count of loans taken, which further declined to 21000 in 2012.

Then the number was plunged to 19000 in 2013. The number of loans taken in 2014 was 20050. The count was 21000 and 22000 in 2015 and 2016 respectively.

Overall. the adults aged between 18-64 covers the maximum portion while the largest number of loans was taken during 2016.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 6.0

The response covers all three charts effectively. You have identified the main features, such as the age distribution, the loan categories, and the trend over time. However, the analysis could be improved by making more direct comparisons. For instance, when discussing the loan categories, you list the percentages but do not explicitly contrast the high popularity of fiction with the low popularity of audiobooks. Additionally, the overview is slightly weak; while it mentions the age group and the peak year, it could better synthesize the relationship between the data sets to provide a more cohesive summary of the library's usage patterns.

Coherence and Cohesion — Band 6.5

The essay is logically organized into four paragraphs, which helps the reader follow the information. You use some cohesive devices such as 'Moreover', 'Moving further', and 'Whereas' to transition between ideas. However, some of these transitions feel a bit mechanical. The referencing is generally clear, though the flow between the second and third paragraphs could be smoother. The use of paragraphing is appropriate, and the progression of information from the pie chart to the table and finally the bar graph is logical and easy to follow.

Lexical Resource — Band 6.0

You have a sufficient range of vocabulary to convey the information clearly. You use terms like 'graphical representation', 'proportion', 'insignificant change', and 'plunged' appropriately. There are some minor issues with word choice, such as 'taken the loan of 6%', which is slightly unnatural; 'accounted for 6% of loans' would be more precise. You also have some repetitive phrasing, such as 'the number of loans taken', which could be varied with synonyms like 'the volume of borrowing' or 'the figure for loans'.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 5.5

You demonstrate a mix of simple and complex sentence structures. There are some grammatical errors, such as 'Children' non-fiction and adult non-fiction taken the loan', which lacks an auxiliary verb ('have taken'). Additionally, 'the number was plunged' is an incorrect passive construction; 'the number plunged' would be more accurate. While these errors are present, they do not impede communication. To reach a higher band, focus on ensuring subject-verb agreement and refining the use of passive voice in data reporting.

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