Band 5.5 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer
Overall Band Score: 5.5 · Cambridge IELTS 20 · 2026-08-14
IELTS Writing Task 1 question
The charts below give information about a public library in a town called Little Chalfont.
Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
Student answer (Band 5.5)
The pie chart displays the age of library members and the graph shows tha total number of loans between 2007 and 2016, while the list illustrate the categories of loan in 2016.
Overall, the adults aged 18-64 occupied the largest proportion of the library members, while the children possess’s the lowest. Children’s fiction has the highest percentage of total loans, sharing the spot with adult’s fiction, while the total number of loans remained fluctuated between the 2007 and 2016.
Starting with pie chart, adults aged 65 and over contains the smallest proportion of library members, followed by young adults with 15% members. Adults aged from 18 to 64 posses more than half of total library members with a proportion of 51%,
AI examiner evaluation
| Criterion | Band |
|---|---|
| Task Achievement / Task Response | 5.0 |
| Coherence and Cohesion | 5.5 |
| Lexical Resource | 5.5 |
| Grammatical Range and Accuracy | 5.0 |
| Overall | 5.5 |
Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 5.0
The response fails to meet the minimum word count requirement of 150 words, which significantly impacts the ability to fully develop the response. While you have identified the main features of the charts, the analysis is incomplete. You have not included the data for the 2016 loan categories, and the description of the trends is cut off mid-sentence. To improve, ensure you provide a comprehensive overview of all data sets provided in the prompt and extend your analysis to meet the length requirement. The current response is too brief to adequately cover all parts of the task.
Coherence and Cohesion — Band 5.5
The essay is organized into an introduction, an overview, and a partial body paragraph. However, the progression is interrupted by the unfinished nature of the text. Cohesive devices such as 'Starting with' and 'while' are used, but the lack of completion makes the overall structure feel disjointed. To improve, ensure that each paragraph is fully developed and that you use a wider range of linking words to connect your ideas logically. The abrupt ending prevents a clear, coherent flow of information throughout the response.
Lexical Resource — Band 5.5
You demonstrate a basic range of vocabulary, such as 'proportion', 'fluctuated', and 'categories'. However, there are several errors in word choice and form, such as 'possess’s' (incorrect possessive) and 'contains' (when referring to a proportion). Additionally, 'sharing the spot' is slightly informal for an academic report. To achieve a higher band, focus on using more precise academic collocations and ensure accurate word forms. Expanding your vocabulary to include more varied ways to describe data trends would also be beneficial.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 5.0
The response contains a mix of simple and some complex structures, but there are frequent grammatical errors. Examples include 'the list illustrate' (subject-verb agreement error), 'total number of loans remained fluctuated' (incorrect verb form), and 'adults aged 65 and over contains' (subject-verb agreement). Punctuation is also inconsistent, particularly with the use of apostrophes. To improve, focus on subject-verb agreement and the correct use of tense when describing historical data. Proofreading for basic grammatical accuracy is essential to ensure your meaning is clearly conveyed.
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