Band 6.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 6.0 · Cambridge IELTS 20 · 2026-08-14

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

The charts below give information about a public library in a town called Little Chalfont.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

 

Student answer (Band 6.0)

The pie chart and bar graph below illustrates the public library in a town called Little Chalfont

Overall , the adults of age 18-24 contributes as the largest member of the library whereas adults of 65 and over have least contribution. The total loan by taken by the adult fiction , non fiction and audio books. On the other hand the least total loan is of young adults. The least was taken in 2007 and highest in 2016.

The pie chart indicates 51% of adults (18-64) as the majority of library member in2016. The children contributes 22 % whereas young adults 13 -17and over is 15%. Moreover the contribution of adults 65 and over is the lowest with 12%. As the majority of the member in the library the highest loan is so taken by the adult group which is adult fiction , adult non fiction and adult audiobooks with 38% , 13%, 2% respectively

The bar graph shows the number of total loans in the year 2007 to 2016. The lowest loan taken was of approximately 15000 in the year 2007 where as it gradually increased over the period and took the hike of approximately 22000 in the year 2016

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 6.0

You have successfully identified the main features of both the pie chart and the bar graph. You provided a clear overview and supported your points with data from the charts. However, there are some inaccuracies in your interpretation of the data. For instance, you mention 'adults of 18-24' as the largest group, but the chart labels this category as 'adults (18-64)'. Additionally, your description of the loan categories is slightly confusing; you list fiction, non-fiction, and audiobooks as if they are separate from the 'adult' group, whereas they are sub-categories of it. To improve, ensure you carefully cross-reference the labels in the charts with your text to avoid misrepresenting the data.

Coherence and Cohesion — Band 6.0

The response is organized into logical paragraphs, with an introduction, body paragraphs, and a summary. You use some cohesive devices such as 'Moreover', 'On the other hand', and 'whereas' to link ideas. However, the flow is occasionally hindered by awkward phrasing and mechanical transitions. For example, the sentence 'The total loan by taken by the adult fiction...' is grammatically disjointed, which affects the clarity of the progression. To reach a higher band, focus on using a wider range of cohesive devices more naturally and ensure that each sentence logically follows the previous one without grammatical interruptions.

Lexical Resource — Band 6.0

You have an adequate range of vocabulary to convey the main points, such as 'majority', 'contribution', and 'gradually increased'. However, there are several instances of imprecise word choice and repetition. For example, you use the word 'contribution' repeatedly to describe membership percentages, which is not the most accurate term for library membership. Additionally, there are minor errors in word formation, such as 'member' instead of 'members'. To improve, try to vary your vocabulary by using synonyms and more precise terminology related to data reporting, such as 'proportion', 'accounted for', or 'fluctuated'.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 5.5

The response contains a mix of simple and complex sentence structures. While the meaning is generally clear, there are frequent grammatical errors, particularly with subject-verb agreement (e.g., 'The pie chart... illustrates', 'children contributes') and article usage. There are also issues with sentence construction, such as 'The total loan by taken by the adult fiction', which lacks a clear verb structure. Punctuation is also inconsistent, with unnecessary spaces before commas. To improve, focus on basic grammatical accuracy, specifically subject-verb agreement and the correct use of passive voice, which is essential for describing data.

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