Band 5.5 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 5.5 · Cambridge IELTS 20 · 2026-08-15

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

The charts below give information about a public library in a town called Little Chalfont.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

 

Student answer (Band 5.5)

The chart provide information about little chalfont library They show the the agr of library members in 2016,the perecentage of loan by category in 2016.and the total number of loan between 2017 and 2016

Overall adults aged 18-64 made up the largest proportion of of library members.

Children fiction and’s adult fiction were most popular loan category while the total number of loan generally increased over the period.

In 2016 adult aged 28-64accounted for 51% of library members.Children represented 22%followed by young adults aged 13-17at 15%.Adults aged 65 and over made up the smallest portion at 12%.

Finally,the total number of of loan rose from approximately 15,500 in 2007 to around 19000 in 2008 The figured then remained around 20,000 for several years ,although there were some fluctuations.after a decline in2013, the of loan increased again and reached approximately 21500 in 2016.

Young adult books and adult audio books and adukt audio books each accounted for 2%and children DVDs were the least popular category at only 1%

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 5.5

The response covers all three charts provided, identifying key trends and data points. You successfully highlighted the largest and smallest proportions for library members and the overall trend for loans. However, the report lacks a clear, cohesive structure, and some data points are presented in a disjointed manner. To reach a higher band, ensure that comparisons are more integrated rather than just listing statistics. For instance, when discussing the loan categories, you could have grouped the most and least popular items more effectively to provide a clearer summary of the information.

Coherence and Cohesion — Band 5.5

The essay is organised into paragraphs, but the flow between sentences is often mechanical. There is a lack of varied cohesive devices; you rely heavily on simple transitions like 'Finally' or 'In 2016'. Furthermore, punctuation errors, such as missing spaces after commas and periods (e.g., '2016.and', '2008 The'), disrupt the reading process. The referencing is sometimes unclear, and the logical progression of ideas could be improved by using more sophisticated linking words to connect the data points to the overall trends described in the introduction.

Lexical Resource — Band 5.5

Your vocabulary is adequate for the task but lacks the precision and range required for a higher band. You use basic terms like 'popular' and 'increased' repeatedly. There are also several spelling errors and typos, such as 'agr' instead of 'age', 'perecentage' instead of 'percentage', and 'adukt' instead of 'adult'. These errors, while not always impeding communication, demonstrate a lack of control over vocabulary. To improve, focus on using more academic synonyms and ensuring accurate spelling of key terms related to data description.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 5.0

The response contains a mix of simple and complex sentence structures, but there are frequent grammatical errors. Issues include subject-verb agreement ('The chart provide'), missing articles ('the of loan'), and inconsistent punctuation. The sentence structure is often repetitive, and the lack of proper sentence boundaries makes some parts difficult to follow. While you attempt to use complex structures, the high frequency of errors in basic grammar and punctuation significantly impacts the clarity of your writing. Focusing on proofreading for basic errors would be a great first step.

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