Band 5.5 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer
Overall Band Score: 5.5 · Cambridge IELTS 20 · 2026-08-16
IELTS Writing Task 1 question
The charts below give information about a public library in a town called Little Chalfont.
Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
Student answer (Band 5.5)
The charts illustrate personal data of public library in city Little Chalfont.
Overall, the highest figure of members who attend library is the age group of adults 18-64 whereas children fiction and adult fiction was having highest proportion. Moreover, in total number of loans over the time period.
Firstly, the chart shows the strength to attend library upon their age groups, Adults with 18-64 age were having the highest proportion to attend with 51%, whereas adults over 65 were having lowest proportion to attend library. Coming to table which describes types of loans by category, children's friction and adults friction accounts for highest position with 38% also children's DVDs comes with least proportion with 1%.
Lastly, the bar graph shows number of loans by years 2007 to 2016, accordingly. the loans ranges between 15,000 to 22,000 over the time period. years 2010 and 2012 have same value of 21,000. there were many fluctuations whereas in 2013 it decreased with around 2,000.
AI examiner evaluation
| Criterion | Band |
|---|---|
| Task Achievement / Task Response | 5.5 |
| Coherence and Cohesion | 5.5 |
| Lexical Resource | 5.5 |
| Grammatical Range and Accuracy | 5.0 |
| Overall | 5.5 |
Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 5.5
The response covers all three charts provided, but the analysis is somewhat superficial. While you identify the highest and lowest figures, you fail to provide a clear, analytical overview that synthesizes the data. For instance, the overview paragraph is fragmented and lacks a cohesive summary of the trends. The description of the bar graph is also slightly inaccurate, as you mention 'fluctuations' but do not clearly describe the overall trend of the library loans over the decade. To improve, ensure your overview highlights the most significant trends or differences rather than just listing isolated data points.
Coherence and Cohesion — Band 5.5
The essay is organized into paragraphs, which is a positive step. However, the logical progression between sentences is often weak. The use of cohesive devices is mechanical and sometimes misused, such as 'Coming to table' and 'accordingly. the loans'. These transitions feel forced rather than natural. Additionally, the referencing is occasionally unclear, making it difficult for the reader to follow the flow of information. Improving the use of linking words and ensuring that each paragraph has a clear, singular focus would significantly enhance the coherence of your writing.
Lexical Resource — Band 5.5
The vocabulary is generally adequate for the task but lacks the precision required for a higher band. There are several instances of awkward word choices, such as 'personal data of public library' instead of 'information about a public library' and 'children's friction' instead of 'children's fiction'. The repetition of 'proportion' and 'attend' suggests a limited range. To achieve a higher score, try to use more varied synonyms and ensure that your collocations are accurate. Focus on using topic-specific vocabulary related to data reporting, such as 'accounted for', 'fluctuated', or 'remained stable'.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 5.0
The response contains a mix of simple and some attempted complex structures, but there are frequent grammatical errors that occasionally impede clarity. Issues include incorrect article usage ('the age group of adults'), subject-verb agreement ('adults over 65 were having lowest'), and punctuation errors (e.g., starting sentences with lowercase letters after periods). The sentence structure is often repetitive, relying on 'there were' or 'was having'. To improve, focus on mastering basic sentence construction and proofreading for punctuation and capitalization errors, which are currently quite frequent.
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