Band 4.5 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer
Overall Band Score: 4.5 · Cambridge IELTS 20 · 2026-08-16
IELTS Writing Task 1 question
The charts below give information about a public library in a town called Little Chalfont.
Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
Student answer (Band 4.5)
The charts below gives information about public Library in a town called little Chalfont.
In the picture Age of library members (2016) Children is 22, young adults 13-17 is 15, adults 18-64 is 51, adults 65 and over is 12.
Picture shows Total loans by category (2016).
Children's fiction is 38%, children's non- fiction is 6%, children's DVDs is 1%, young adults is 2%, Adult fiction is 38%, adult non-fiction is 13% ans adult audio books is 2%.
In the last bar graph reveals information about Total number of loans ([redacted phone]).
In the year 2007 number of loans is up to the 15,000. In the year 2008 number of loans is near the 20,000. In the year 2009 number of the loans near about 20,000. In the year 2010 number of loans is up to the 20,000. Year 2011 number of loans up to the 20,000. Year 2012 number of loans up the 20,000. Year 2013 number of loans near about
AI examiner evaluation
| Criterion | Band |
|---|---|
| Task Achievement / Task Response | 4.0 |
| Coherence and Cohesion | 4.0 |
| Lexical Resource | 4.5 |
| Grammatical Range and Accuracy | 4.5 |
| Overall | 4.5 |
Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 4.0
The response fails to provide a summary or report the main features. Instead, it lists data points in a repetitive, mechanical fashion. There is no attempt to make comparisons or identify trends, which is essential for Task 1. Furthermore, the response is incomplete, ending abruptly mid-sentence, which means the final chart is not fully addressed. To improve, you must group data logically and highlight significant findings, such as the dominance of adult fiction and children's fiction, rather than simply transcribing numbers from the charts.
Coherence and Cohesion — Band 4.0
The response lacks logical progression. Each sentence is a separate, isolated statement of data, making the text feel like a list rather than a coherent report. There is a complete absence of cohesive devices (e.g., 'however', 'in contrast', 'furthermore') to link ideas. Paragraphing is also absent, and the abrupt ending further disrupts the flow. To improve, you should use transition words to connect your sentences and organize your report into clear paragraphs: an introduction, an overview of main trends, and specific details.
Lexical Resource — Band 4.5
The vocabulary is very limited and repetitive. You rely almost exclusively on the words provided in the prompt (e.g., 'number of loans', 'children', 'adults'). There is no attempt to use a range of vocabulary to describe trends or data (e.g., 'fluctuated', 'remained stable', 'accounted for'). Additionally, there are errors in word choice and phrasing, such as 'In the picture Age of library members', which is not appropriate for describing a chart. Expanding your range of reporting verbs and nouns is necessary to reach a higher band.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 4.5
The grammar is characterized by frequent errors that often impede clarity. There is a lack of variety in sentence structure, with almost every sentence following a simple 'Subject + is + number' pattern. Articles are frequently missing or misused (e.g., 'In the picture Age of library members'), and there are issues with subject-verb agreement (e.g., 'The charts below gives'). The lack of complex structures and the presence of basic errors throughout the text indicate a limited control of grammar.
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