Band 5.5 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 5.5 · Cambridge IELTS 20 · 2026-08-16

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

The charts below give information about a public library in a town called Little Chalfont.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

 

Student answer (Band 5.5)

The pie chart illustrates the how much number of loans were taken from library in different age group of people in different years.

Overall, almost half of the library members were adult

While remaining 12% are adults over age 65, 22% are children and 15% are young adults. As show in table, most of loans were belong to children's fiction and adult fiction which is 38% for both. In contrast, children's DVD, young adults, and adult audio books were least used which comprised of 5% total.

Moreover, total number of loans were vary from year 2007 to 2016. There were significantly little fluctuation in number loans with passage of years. However, in 2016 this figure reached the peak of more than 20000. In 2010 and 2015, the figure also rose to 20000 but comparitivily lower than 2016. Meanwhile in 2007, the proportion of loans declined substantially which only made up 16000.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 5.5

The response covers the main features of the charts, including age groups, loan categories, and trends over time. However, the analysis is somewhat superficial. For example, the statement 'almost half of the library members were adult' is inaccurate based on the data provided, and the description of the trends is slightly confusing due to the lack of clear data points. While you have selected key features, the comparison between categories could be more precise. To improve, ensure that your data interpretation is accurate and that you clearly distinguish between the different charts provided in the prompt to provide a more comprehensive overview.

Coherence and Cohesion — Band 5.5

The essay is organised into paragraphs, which helps the reader follow the structure. However, the use of cohesive devices is somewhat mechanical and occasionally inaccurate. For instance, the transition 'As show in table' is grammatically incorrect and disrupts the flow. Additionally, the progression of ideas between the age groups and the loan categories is abrupt. Using a wider range of linking words and ensuring that each paragraph has a clear topic sentence would improve the logical flow. Referencing is sometimes unclear, making it difficult to track which chart is being discussed at specific points.

Lexical Resource — Band 5.5

The vocabulary is generally adequate for the task but lacks the precision required for higher bands. There are several instances of awkward phrasing, such as 'how much number of loans' and 'most of loans were belong to'. You rely on basic descriptors and struggle with collocations, such as 'significantly little fluctuation'. To reach a higher band, you should aim to use more academic vocabulary and ensure that word choices are natural and precise. Avoid repetitive structures and focus on using more varied terminology to describe trends and proportions.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 5.5

The response contains a mix of simple and complex sentence structures, but there are frequent grammatical errors that occasionally impede clarity. Examples include 'the how much number of loans', 'As show in table', and 'total number of loans were vary'. Subject-verb agreement and article usage are inconsistent throughout the text. While the meaning is generally understandable, the frequency of these errors prevents the writing from reaching a higher band. Focusing on basic sentence construction and proofreading for common errors like verb tense and pluralisation would be highly beneficial.

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