Band 5.5 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer
Overall Band Score: 5.5 · Cambridge IELTS 20 · 2026-08-17
IELTS Writing Task 1 question
The charts below give information about a public library in a town called Little Chalfont.
Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
Student answer (Band 5.5)
The given multiple charts illustrate the information about a public library in a town called little chalfont. Noticeably, adult of age 18 to 64 has the highest proportion in the membership of library.
In library members, half of the ratio was covered by adults age of 18 to 64 over the whole. children has only 22 percent member in chalfont library during 2016. Where as, young adult and above 65 adults has 12% and 15% membership respectively. On the other hand, children fiction and adult fiction book has 38% loan. However, children's DVDs has only minimal loan just one percent and similarly, young adult and adult audio book has only 2% loan.
The total number of loans was fluctuated over the period. In 2007, the total numbers of loans was above 15000 which was gradually increased and reached at nearly 19000 in 2008. After that it slightly decreased then after rose in 2009 remain stable till 2012 but in 2013, again deep down and occur at 19000 as in 2008. Then it was slight up and reached at 21000 in 2016.
Overall, children fiction book and adult fiction book has highest ration in loans.
AI examiner evaluation
| Criterion | Band |
|---|---|
| Task Achievement / Task Response | 5.5 |
| Coherence and Cohesion | 5.5 |
| Lexical Resource | 5.5 |
| Grammatical Range and Accuracy | 5.5 |
| Overall | 5.5 |
Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 5.5
You have successfully identified the main features of the charts, such as the membership demographics and the loan trends. However, the response lacks a clear overview that synthesises the data effectively. While you mention some figures, the comparison between categories is sometimes weak. For instance, you list percentages for membership but do not fully contrast the significant dominance of the 18-64 age group against the others. Additionally, the description of the loan trends is somewhat repetitive and lacks a cohesive summary of the overall trajectory. To improve, ensure you highlight the most significant trends and differences rather than just listing data points.
Coherence and Cohesion — Band 5.5
The response is organised into paragraphs, which helps the reader follow the structure. However, the use of cohesive devices is somewhat mechanical and occasionally inaccurate. For example, 'Where as' is used incorrectly as a sentence starter, and 'deep down' is an informal, non-standard way to describe a decline in data. The transition between the membership data and the loan data is abrupt. To improve, focus on using a wider variety of linking words (e.g., 'consequently', 'in contrast', 'furthermore') and ensure that each paragraph has a clear topic sentence that guides the reader through the information.
Lexical Resource — Band 5.5
Your vocabulary is generally adequate for the task, but it lacks the precision required for a higher band. You rely on basic terms like 'highest proportion' and 'total number'. There are also some awkward collocations and word choices, such as 'deep down' to describe a decrease and 'slight up' to describe an increase. These phrases are not appropriate for an academic report. To improve, aim to use more precise vocabulary related to data description, such as 'accounted for', 'fluctuated', 'witnessed a decline', and 'remained stable'.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 5.5
You demonstrate a mix of simple and complex sentence structures, but there are frequent grammatical errors that occasionally distract the reader. Issues include subject-verb agreement (e.g., 'adult of age 18 to 64 has' should be 'adults aged 18 to 64 have') and incorrect article usage. There are also errors in tense consistency when describing past data. While these errors do not completely impede communication, they are frequent enough to lower the score. Focus on proofreading for basic errors like pluralisation and verb forms to improve your accuracy.
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