Band 5.5 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer
Overall Band Score: 5.5 · Cambridge IELTS 20 · 2026-08-17
IELTS Writing Task 1 question
The charts below give information about a public library in a town called Little Chalfont.
Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
Student answer (Band 5.5)
The pie chart illustrates the age of library members while the tables represents the total number of loans by category and the bar demonstrates total number of loans between 2007 and 2016 in a public library located in a town called Little Chalfont.
Overall, adults age 18-64 have highest proportion compared to adults of age 65 and over who have lowest share in pie chart, In table fiction are most desired by both adult and children where as DVDs and audio books are less desired. In 2016 highest loan was done compared to 2007 with lowest.
Adults age 18-64 are highest age group that visit library which accounts to 51%, followed by children, young adults between 16-17 and adults of 65 and over who are lowest age group that visits library with share of 12%.
In case of loans children fictions and adult fiction are most desired with 38%, followed by non-fictions while adult audiobook, children's DVDs are less Prefered being 2% and 1% respectively.
The bar for the total number of loans fluctuates slightly every year, in 2016 total number of loans peakd with slightly over 20,000 compared to 2007 with lowest which account to just over 15,000.
AI examiner evaluation
| Criterion | Band |
|---|---|
| Task Achievement / Task Response | 6.0 |
| Coherence and Cohesion | 5.5 |
| Lexical Resource | 5.5 |
| Grammatical Range and Accuracy | 5.0 |
| Overall | 5.5 |
Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 6.0
You have successfully identified the main features of the three charts, including the age demographics, loan categories, and the trend over time. You provided a clear overview and supported your points with specific data from the charts. However, the response lacks a degree of analytical depth. For instance, while you mention that fiction is the most desired category, you could have made more explicit comparisons between the categories to better highlight the contrast between popular and less popular items. Additionally, some data points, such as the specific percentages for non-fiction, were omitted. To reach a higher band, ensure that all key features are not just listed, but synthesized to provide a more comprehensive summary of the information provided.
Coherence and Cohesion — Band 5.5
The response is logically organized into paragraphs, with an introduction, an overview, and body paragraphs focusing on specific data sets. You use some cohesive devices, such as 'followed by' and 'in case of', to link ideas. However, the flow is occasionally mechanical, and some transitions between sentences are abrupt. For example, the transition between the overview and the first body paragraph could be smoother. Additionally, there are some issues with punctuation, such as the comma splice in the second paragraph ('...pie chart, In table...'), which affects the overall readability. Improving the variety and accuracy of your linking words will help the ideas flow more naturally.
Lexical Resource — Band 5.5
You demonstrate an adequate range of vocabulary for the task, using terms like 'proportion', 'fluctuates', and 'demographics'. However, there are several instances of imprecise word choice and minor errors. For example, you use 'desired' to describe loan categories, whereas 'popular' or 'frequently borrowed' would be more appropriate in this context. You also use 'lowest share in pie chart' and 'highest loan was done', which sound slightly unnatural. To improve, focus on using more precise collocations related to data interpretation and ensure that your word choices are consistently appropriate for an academic report.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 5.0
You use a mix of simple and complex sentence structures, but there are frequent grammatical errors that occasionally distract the reader. Common issues include missing articles (e.g., 'In table', 'in pie chart'), subject-verb agreement errors (e.g., 'tables represents', 'fiction are'), and punctuation errors. While these errors do not prevent the reader from understanding your meaning, they are frequent enough to limit your score. To reach a higher band, focus on proofreading for basic grammatical accuracy, particularly regarding articles and pluralization, and try to incorporate a wider variety of complex sentence structures with greater precision.
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