Band 5.5 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 5.5 · Cambridge IELTS 20 · 2026-08-17

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

The charts below give information about a public library in a town called Little Chalfont.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

 

Student answer (Band 5.5)

The chart shows the age distribution of members of Little Chalfont Library, the categories of the loan in 2016, rose in the amount of the loan between 2007 and 2016.

Overall, the adults aged 18-64 account for 51% in members of library proportion, while the fiction books were the most borrowed item. In addition, the amount of the loan in 2007 is 15,000 and increased to 20,000 in 2016.

In 2016, the age group of the adults 18-64 was accounted for 51% of the library's membership, the children accounted for 22% , the young adults aged 13-17 represented 15% of the library members. The adults aged 65 and over represented 12% least number of the members of the library.

Regarding loan categories, the children and the adult fiction accounted for 38% each. In addition, the Adult non-fiction is about 13%, while children's non-fiction is about 6%. The other categories were about 1 to 2 % each.

Finally, the loan rose to 15,000 in 2007 to 20,000 in 2016 with a slightly decline in 2013.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 5.5

You have successfully identified the main features of the charts, including the age distribution, loan categories, and the trend over time. However, the report lacks a clear, cohesive summary of the data. While you mention the figures, the analysis is somewhat mechanical and lacks insightful comparisons. For instance, you list the percentages for age groups but do not highlight the significant gap between the largest group (18-64) and the smallest (65+). To reach a higher band, ensure you synthesise the information rather than just listing the data points, and provide a more analytical overview in the introduction.

Coherence and Cohesion — Band 5.5

The response is organised into logical paragraphs, which helps the reader follow the structure. You use some cohesive devices like 'In addition' and 'Regarding', but these are used somewhat repetitively. The flow between sentences is occasionally hindered by awkward phrasing, such as 'the loan rose to 15,000 in 2007 to 20,000 in 2016'. Improving the variety of linking words and ensuring that referencing (e.g., 'the latter', 'this figure') is used more effectively would improve the overall cohesion of your writing.

Lexical Resource — Band 5.5

Your vocabulary is adequate for the task, allowing you to convey the necessary information clearly. You use some topic-specific terms like 'age distribution', 'membership', and 'loan categories'. However, there is a lack of variety in your reporting verbs and descriptive language. Phrases like 'accounted for' are used repeatedly, which makes the writing feel a bit limited. To improve, try to incorporate more varied synonyms for 'increase' or 'represent' and use more precise collocations to describe the data trends.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 5.5

You demonstrate a mix of simple and complex sentence structures. However, there are several grammatical errors that occur throughout the text, such as 'the categories of the loan in 2016, rose in the amount' and 'the loan rose to 15,000 in 2007 to 20,000'. These errors, while not impeding communication, are frequent enough to prevent a higher score. Pay closer attention to preposition usage and verb tense consistency when describing past data. Focusing on sentence construction and proofreading for subject-verb agreement will help you achieve a higher band.

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