Band 6.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer
Overall Band Score: 6.0 · Cambridge IELTS 20 · 2026-08-17
IELTS Writing Task 1 question
The charts below give information about a public library in a town called Little Chalfont.
Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
Student answer (Band 6.0)
The chart shows the age distribution of members of Little Chalfont Library, the categories of the loan in 2016, the rose in the amount of the loan between 2007 and 2016.
Overall, the adults aged 18-64 account for 51% in members of library proportion, while the fiction books were the most borrowed item. In addition, the amount of loan in 2007 is 15,000 and escalate to 20,000 in 2016.
In 2016, the aged group of the adults 18-64 were accounted for 51% members of the library, the children was 22% , the young adults aged 13-17 represented 15% of the library members. The adults aged 65 and over represented 12% the least number of the members of the library.
Regarding loan categories, the children and the adult fiction accounted for 38% each. In addition, the Adult non-fiction is about 13%, while children's non-fiction is about 6%. The other categories were about 1 to 2 % each.
Finally, the loan rose from 15,000 in 2007 to 20,000 in 2016 with slight decline in 2013.
AI examiner evaluation
| Criterion | Band |
|---|---|
| Task Achievement / Task Response | 6.0 |
| Coherence and Cohesion | 6.0 |
| Lexical Resource | 5.5 |
| Grammatical Range and Accuracy | 5.5 |
| Overall | 6.0 |
Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 6.0
You have successfully identified the main features of the charts, including the age distribution, loan categories, and the trend over time. You provided clear data points to support your descriptions. However, the report could be improved by making more direct comparisons between the categories. For instance, noting that children and adult fiction were equally popular (38% each) is good, but you could also highlight that these two categories combined account for over three-quarters of all loans. The overview is present but could be more integrated into the flow of the report to better highlight the 'big picture' trends rather than just listing facts.
Coherence and Cohesion — Band 6.0
The response is logically organized into paragraphs, with each focusing on a specific chart. You use basic cohesive devices such as 'In addition', 'Regarding', and 'Finally' to transition between ideas. However, some of the linking is a bit mechanical, and the referencing is occasionally unclear, such as in the phrase 'the least number of the members of the library', which feels slightly disconnected from the previous clause. To reach a higher band, try to vary your cohesive devices and ensure that the relationship between sentences is more fluid and less reliant on simple list-like structures.
Lexical Resource — Band 5.5
You demonstrate an adequate range of vocabulary for the task, using terms like 'age distribution', 'accounted for', and 'escalate'. However, there are some inaccuracies in word choice and collocation. For example, 'the rose in the amount of the loan' is grammatically incorrect; 'the rise in the number of loans' would be more natural. Additionally, 'the aged group of the adults' is slightly awkward phrasing. While your vocabulary is sufficient to convey the meaning clearly, you need to use more precise collocations and avoid repetitive phrasing to achieve a higher score.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 5.5
You use a mix of simple and complex sentence structures, but there are frequent grammatical errors. For example, 'the adults aged 18-64 account for 51% in members of library proportion' is clunky and contains unnecessary prepositions. You also have issues with subject-verb agreement and article usage, such as 'the children was 22%' (should be 'were') and '12% the least number'. While these errors do not impede communication, they are frequent enough to prevent a higher band. Focus on subject-verb agreement and ensuring that your complex sentences are constructed with correct prepositional phrases.
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