Band 5.5 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer
Overall Band Score: 5.5 · Cambridge IELTS 20 · 2026-08-17
IELTS Writing Task 1 question
The charts below give information about a public library in a town called Little Chalfont.
Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
Student answer (Band 5.5)
The chart shows the age distribution of members of Little Chalfont Library, the categories of the loan in 2016, the rose in the amount of the loan between 2007 and 2016.
Overall, the adults aged 18-64 account for 51% in members of library proportion, while the fiction books were the most borrowed item. In addition, the amount of loan in 2007 is 15,000 and escalate to 20,000 in 2016.
In 2016, the aged group of the adults 18-64 were accounted for 51% members of the library, the children was 22% , the young adults aged 13-17 represented 15% of the library members. The adults aged 65 and over represented 12% the least number of the members of the library.
Regarding loan categories, the children and the adult fiction accounted for 38% each. In addition, the Adult non-fiction is about 13%, while children's non-fiction is about 6%. The other categories were about 1 to 2 % each.
Finally, the loan rose from 15,000 in 2007 to 20,000 in 2016 with slight decline in 2013.
AI examiner evaluation
| Criterion | Band |
|---|---|
| Task Achievement / Task Response | 5.5 |
| Coherence and Cohesion | 6.0 |
| Lexical Resource | 5.5 |
| Grammatical Range and Accuracy | 5.5 |
| Overall | 5.5 |
Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 5.5
The response covers all three charts provided, identifying key features such as the dominant age group (18-64) and the overall upward trend in loans. However, the reporting is somewhat mechanical and lacks a clear, analytical focus. For instance, while you mention the 15,000 to 20,000 increase, you could have better highlighted the significance of the 2013 dip or compared the categories more effectively. The overview is present but could be more integrated to provide a clearer summary of the main trends rather than just listing data points. Overall, the response meets the requirements of the task but remains at a descriptive level.
Coherence and Cohesion — Band 6.0
The essay is logically organized into paragraphs, each focusing on a specific chart. There is a clear progression from the introduction to the overview and then to the body paragraphs. However, the use of cohesive devices is somewhat repetitive and mechanical. Phrases like 'In addition' and 'Regarding' are used frequently, which makes the flow feel a bit stiff. Referencing is generally clear, but the transition between the age distribution and the loan categories could be smoother. The structure is sufficient for the task, but more varied linking words would improve the overall flow.
Lexical Resource — Band 5.5
You have used a sufficient range of vocabulary to describe the data, such as 'age distribution', 'accounted for', and 'escalate'. However, there are some inaccuracies in word choice and collocation. For example, 'the rose in the amount' is grammatically incorrect (should be 'the rise'), and 'the aged group of the adults' is slightly unnatural. Some phrasing is repetitive, such as the repeated use of 'members of the library'. To reach a higher band, try to use more precise synonyms for 'increase' or 'represented' and ensure that your collocations are more natural.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 5.5
The response contains a mix of simple and complex sentence structures. While the meaning is generally clear, there are several grammatical errors that persist throughout the text. Examples include 'the children was 22%' (subject-verb agreement error), '12% the least number of the members' (missing preposition/article), and 'the amount of loan... is 15,000 and escalate' (tense inconsistency). These errors do not impede communication, but they do indicate a lack of control over complex structures. Focusing on subject-verb agreement and consistent tense usage would significantly improve your score.
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