Band 5.5 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 5.5 · Cambridge IELTS 20 · 2026-08-17

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

The charts below give information about a public library in a town called Little Chalfont.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

 

Student answer (Band 5.5)

The chart show the age distribution of members of a Little Chalfont Library, the categories of the loan in 2016, the rose in the amount of the loan between 2007 and 2016.

Overall, the Adults aged 18-64 account for 51% in members of library proportion, while the fiction book's were the most borrowed item. In addition, the amount of loan in 2007 is 15,000 and escalate to 20,000 in 2016.

In 2016, the aged group of the Adults 18-64 were accounted for 51% members of the library, the children was 22% , the young adults aged 13-17 represented 15% of the library members. The adults aged 65 and over represented 12% the least number of the members of the library.

Regarding loan categories, the children and the adult fiction accounted for 38% each. In addition, the Adult non-fiction is about 13%, while children's non-fiction is about 6%. The other categories was about 1 to 2 % each.

Finally, the loan rose to 15,000 in 2007 to 20,000 in 2016 with slightly declined in 2013.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 5.5

The response covers all three charts provided in the prompt, identifying key features such as the dominant age group (18-64) and the most popular loan categories. However, the analysis is somewhat mechanical, listing data points rather than synthesising them effectively. For instance, the comparison between children's and adult fiction is clear, but the report on the loan trend over time lacks a more sophisticated overview of the growth pattern. While the main features are reported, the response would benefit from more analytical comparisons rather than just listing percentages. Overall, it addresses the task requirements adequately.

Coherence and Cohesion — Band 5.5

The essay is organised into logical paragraphs, with an introduction, an overview, and body paragraphs focusing on specific data sets. Cohesive devices such as 'Overall', 'In addition', and 'Finally' are used to link ideas. However, the flow is occasionally hindered by repetitive sentence structures and some awkward phrasing, such as 'the rose in the amount of the loan'. The referencing is generally clear, but the transition between the age distribution and the loan categories could be smoother. The paragraphing is appropriate, and the progression of information is logical enough to follow without difficulty.

Lexical Resource — Band 5.5

The vocabulary is sufficient to convey the information, but it lacks variety and precision. There are several instances of awkward word choice or minor errors, such as 'the categories of the loan' instead of 'loan categories' and 'the rose in the amount' instead of 'the rise in the number'. The use of 'escalate' is a good attempt at a more sophisticated verb, but it is slightly misused in this context. To reach a higher band, you should aim for more precise collocations and a wider range of vocabulary to describe trends and proportions.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 5.5

The response uses a mix of simple and complex sentence structures, but there are frequent grammatical errors. Examples include 'The chart show' (subject-verb agreement), 'the fiction book's were' (incorrect pluralisation/possessive), and 'the loan rose to 15,000 in 2007 to 20,000' (incorrect preposition usage). While these errors do not impede communication, they are persistent throughout the text. To improve, focus on subject-verb agreement, correct article usage, and ensuring that prepositions are used accurately when describing data trends.

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