Band 6.5 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer
Overall Band Score: 6.5 · Cambridge IELTS 20 · 2026-08-17
IELTS Writing Task 1 question
The charts below give information about a public library in a town called Little Chalfont.
Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
Student answer (Band 6.5)
The three charts illustrate information regarding a Little Chalfont library in a community.
Overall, adult aged 18 to 64 visited more to library in 2016, while children's fiction loan and adult fiction had the highest percentage. In contrast, the total number of loans from 2007 to 2016, showed an upward trend, except in 2013, experienced a slight fall.
In terms of age of library members in 2016, adults aged 18 to 64, visited more with the proportion of 51, meanwhile the share of children who visited the library stood at 22. Moreover, only 15 teenager aged 13 to 17, who went to the library. Similarly, 12 adults aged 65 and over used the public library. Furthermore, children's fiction and adult fiction loans stood at 38% in 2016. In addition, adult non-fiction loan had 13%, and young adults and adult audio books loan experienced the same percentages which was 2%. Additionally, children's DVDs loan was only 1%.
In the context of total number of loans from 2007 to 2016, at the start, the number of loans stood at almost 16,000, before increasing to 18,000 in 2008 and 2009. In 2010, the number climbed to above 20,000, and remained almost the same in the three years, before decreasing slightly to 19,000 in 2013. The number continued to grow, and reached 23,000 in 2016.
AI examiner evaluation
| Criterion | Band |
|---|---|
| Task Achievement / Task Response | 6.5 |
| Coherence and Cohesion | 7.0 |
| Lexical Resource | 6.0 |
| Grammatical Range and Accuracy | 6.0 |
| Overall | 6.5 |
Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 6.5
The response covers all three charts effectively, identifying key trends and making relevant comparisons. You successfully highlighted the dominance of the 18-64 age group and the upward trend in total loans. However, the report could be improved by better integration of the data. For instance, when discussing the 2016 age demographics, you listed the figures without clearly contrasting them against the smaller groups. Additionally, the statement that 'children's fiction and adult fiction loans stood at 38%' is slightly ambiguous—it is unclear if this is a combined figure or if you meant they were equal. Overall, you have provided a clear summary of the main features.
Coherence and Cohesion — Band 7.0
The essay is logically organized into clear paragraphs, with an introduction, an overview, and two body paragraphs focusing on different data sets. You use a range of cohesive devices such as 'In contrast', 'Moreover', 'Similarly', and 'In the context of'. While the flow is generally good, some transitions feel slightly mechanical or repetitive. For example, the use of 'Additionally' and 'Furthermore' in the second paragraph could be varied to improve the natural progression of ideas. Referencing is generally clear, though the connection between the 2016 data and the historical trend could be more explicitly linked to improve the overall cohesion.
Lexical Resource — Band 6.0
You demonstrate an adequate range of vocabulary for the task, using terms like 'proportion', 'share', 'upward trend', and 'climbed'. There are some minor inaccuracies in word choice, such as 'visited more to library' (should be 'visited the library more') and '15 teenager' (should be '15 teenagers'). You also struggle slightly with collocations, such as 'adult non-fiction loan had 13%'. While these errors do not impede communication, they prevent the response from reaching a higher band. To improve, focus on using more precise reporting verbs and noun phrases to describe data trends.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 6.0
The response uses a mix of simple and complex sentence structures. There are several grammatical errors, such as 'adult aged 18 to 64 visited more to library' (missing articles and incorrect preposition) and 'only 15 teenager aged 13 to 17, who went to the library' (fragmented sentence structure). You also have issues with subject-verb agreement and pluralization, such as 'adult non-fiction loan had 13%'. While these errors are noticeable, they rarely impede the reader's understanding of the data. Increasing the variety of error-free complex sentences would help raise your score in this criterion.
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