Band 5.5 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 5.5 · Cambridge IELTS 20 · 2026-08-17

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

The charts below give information about a public library in a town called Little Chalfont.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

 

Student answer (Band 5.5)

The chart illustrates information regarding Little Chalfont public library . There are three various charts given presenting information one is pie chart which says about age of the library members of 2016 meanwhile table presents the total percentage of loan on different categories of books and further by looking at the graph it depicts the total number of loans from the year 2007 to 2016.

Firstly by focusing on the pie chart, over half of the area is covered by the members of age 18 to 64 whereas other age group like of children has 22 percent of the share and rest of the two are with 12 and 15 percent .

The children's fiction and adult fiction debt equally of 38 percent and least loan is on the children's DVDs in the provided table.

On the other hand in 2016 has more than 23 thousand loans which is the highest of all time.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 5.5

The response covers all three charts, but the analysis is superficial. While you identify the main features, such as the age group distribution and the peak in loans, the comparisons are underdeveloped. For instance, you mention the 18-64 age group and children, but you fail to provide a clear overview or synthesize the data effectively. The description of the table is also quite brief, and the trend description for the graph lacks detail regarding the fluctuations between 2007 and 2016. To improve, ensure you highlight significant trends and make more explicit comparisons between the categories.

Coherence and Cohesion — Band 6.0

The essay is organized into paragraphs, which helps the reader follow the structure. However, the use of cohesive devices is somewhat mechanical and repetitive (e.g., 'Firstly', 'On the other hand'). The transition between the different charts is abrupt, and the logical flow within paragraphs could be improved by using more varied linking words. Referencing is occasionally unclear, such as in the sentence 'rest of the two are with 12 and 15 percent', where the specific categories are not explicitly named. Improving the variety of cohesive devices will help the ideas flow more naturally.

Lexical Resource — Band 5.5

The vocabulary is adequate for the task but lacks precision and variety. You rely on basic phrasing such as 'says about', 'covered by', and 'debt' (likely a misuse of 'account for'). There is a lack of academic collocations necessary for describing data. For example, instead of 'says about', use 'illustrates the distribution of'. The word choice is generally functional, but it does not demonstrate the flexibility or sophistication required for a higher band. Expanding your range of reporting verbs and descriptive adjectives for trends would significantly enhance your score.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 5.5

The response contains a mix of simple and complex sentence structures, but there are frequent grammatical errors that occasionally impede clarity. For example, 'there are three various charts given presenting information one is pie chart' is a run-on sentence with missing punctuation. Additionally, 'adult fiction debt equally of 38 percent' contains a verb error. While the meaning is generally understandable, the frequency of these errors—including issues with articles and prepositions—prevents the writing from reaching a higher band. Focus on proofreading for subject-verb agreement and sentence boundaries.

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