Band 5.5 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer
Overall Band Score: 5.5 · Cambridge IELTS 20 · 2026-08-18
IELTS Writing Task 1 question
The charts below give information about a public library in a town called Little Chalfont.
Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
Student answer (Band 5.5)
The bar chart, table and pie-chart illustrates the proportions of Little Chalfont library located in a town.
Overall, age of library members include children, young adults, and adults below 65 and over. The bar chart presents the comparison between year vs total no of loans while, table give the category of total loans in 2016.
In the pie-chart, 51% of total library have been fully accessed by adults of 18 to 64 although, the rest of 22% is by children while, 15% by young adults and lastly, 12% by adults over 65 that is cheaper. And the table illustrates the enhanced total loan category in 2016 is 38% that are used by children fiction and adult fiction. Similarly, young adults and adult audio books share the same ratio around 2%. The bar chart represents the highest total loan is attained in 2016 almost 23,000 either, in 2007 have the lowest loan is taken around 15000.
In conclusion, this chart gives the comparable information about the little Chalfont Library.
AI examiner evaluation
| Criterion | Band |
|---|---|
| Task Achievement / Task Response | 5.5 |
| Coherence and Cohesion | 5.5 |
| Lexical Resource | 5.5 |
| Grammatical Range and Accuracy | 5.5 |
| Overall | 5.5 |
Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 5.5
The response covers all three visual elements, but the analysis is superficial and lacks a clear, logical structure. While you identify some main features, such as the 51% adult usage and the 2016 peak in loans, the reporting is often disjointed. The comparison between the years is underdeveloped, and the description of the table data is confusingly phrased (e.g., 'enhanced total loan category'). To improve, ensure you group information logically—perhaps by chart type or by theme—and focus on highlighting significant trends rather than simply listing figures. The overview is present but lacks the necessary clarity to effectively summarize the main trends across all three charts.
Coherence and Cohesion — Band 5.5
The essay is organized into paragraphs, but the flow between sentences is often mechanical and sometimes confusing. The use of cohesive devices is limited and occasionally misused, such as the repetitive use of 'while' and 'and' to connect unrelated ideas. The transition between the pie chart data and the table data is abrupt, making it difficult for the reader to follow the progression of information. To reach a higher band, focus on using a wider variety of linking words (e.g., 'furthermore', 'in contrast', 'consequently') and ensure that each paragraph has a clear, singular focus that builds toward a logical conclusion.
Lexical Resource — Band 5.5
The vocabulary is adequate for the task but lacks the precision and variety required for a higher score. You rely on basic descriptors and sometimes use words incorrectly, such as 'enhanced total loan category' or 'fully accessed by adults'. There is also a lack of variety in reporting verbs and comparative language. To improve, try to incorporate more specific vocabulary related to data analysis, such as 'accounted for', 'constituted', 'fluctuated', or 'peaked'. Avoid repeating the same sentence structures and basic adjectives, and focus on using collocations that sound more natural in an academic context.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 5.5
The response contains a mix of simple and complex sentence structures, but there are frequent grammatical errors that occasionally impede clarity. Issues include subject-verb agreement (e.g., 'The bar chart, table and pie-chart illustrates'), incorrect article usage, and awkward phrasing (e.g., 'year vs total no of loans'). Punctuation is also inconsistent, particularly with comma placement. While the meaning is generally understandable, the frequency of these errors prevents the writing from being considered fluent. Focus on proofreading for basic subject-verb agreement and ensuring that your complex sentences are constructed accurately without unnecessary wordiness.
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