Band 5.5 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer
Overall Band Score: 5.5 · Cambridge IELTS 20 · 2026-08-18
IELTS Writing Task 1 question
The charts below give information about a public library in a town called Little Chalfont.
Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
Student answer (Band 5.5)
The charts provide information about little chalfont library,including the age distribution of its members,the percentage of loans in different categories from 2016 to total numbers of loans made between 2007 and 2006.
overall,it is crystal clear from the given information that the highest of loans were accounted for adults aged 18-64 while, adults aged 65 and over represented the smallest group.in terms of loan categories children's fiction and adult fiction were the most popular categories whereas, children's dvds were least borrowed.the total number of loas increased considerably over the period despite a slight decline in 2012 and 2013.
In 2016 adults of age 18-64 were accounted for the highest among the visitors of library members for 51%.children occupies 22% to visit library while, adults who are 65 and above are 15% and young adults who were 13-17 are of 12%.
Moreover, the total loans by category children's fiction and adult fiction gained popular demand to the highest of all where as, adult non-fiction is purchased 13% and most least was children's dvds which borrowed only 1%.
On the other hand, from 2007 the number of loans have considerably icreased with a slight change in 2012 and 2013 were noticed. overall it raise again from 2014 to 2016 it was highest.
AI examiner evaluation
| Criterion | Band |
|---|---|
| Task Achievement / Task Response | 5.5 |
| Coherence and Cohesion | 5.5 |
| Lexical Resource | 5.5 |
| Grammatical Range and Accuracy | 5.0 |
| Overall | 5.5 |
Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 5.5
The response covers all three charts provided, identifying key trends and data points. You successfully highlight the age distribution, the popularity of loan categories, and the overall increase in loans over time. However, the analysis is somewhat mechanical, and the reporting of data could be more precise. For example, stating 'adults of age 18-64 were accounted for the highest' is grammatically awkward and lacks the analytical depth required for a higher band. While you have selected the main features, the comparison between categories could be more integrated to show a clearer overview of the library's usage patterns.
Coherence and Cohesion — Band 5.5
The essay is organised into paragraphs, which helps the reader follow the structure. However, the use of cohesive devices is often repetitive or mechanical, such as the frequent use of 'overall' and 'moreover'. Some transitions are abrupt, and the lack of proper punctuation—specifically missing spaces after commas and periods—makes the text feel disjointed. The logical progression is present, but the flow between sentences is hindered by these mechanical errors and a lack of varied linking words, which prevents the response from achieving a higher score in this criterion.
Lexical Resource — Band 5.5
You demonstrate an adequate range of vocabulary for the task, using terms like 'age distribution', 'represented', and 'considerably'. However, there are several instances of word-choice errors and awkward phrasing, such as 'most least was children's dvds' and 'gained popular demand'. Additionally, there are consistent spelling errors (e.g., 'loas', 'icreased'). While the meaning is generally clear, the lack of precision and the presence of these errors limit the score. To improve, focus on using more natural collocations and ensuring accurate spelling of key terms.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 5.0
The response contains a mix of simple and complex sentence structures, but there are frequent errors in grammar and punctuation. Issues include subject-verb agreement ('adults... were accounted for', 'it raise again'), missing articles, and significant punctuation errors, such as failing to capitalise the start of sentences and omitting spaces after punctuation marks. These errors are noticeable throughout the text. While they do not completely impede communication, they occur with enough frequency to detract from the overall quality of the writing and indicate a lack of control over complex structures.
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