Band 5.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 5.0 · Cambridge IELTS 20 · 2026-08-19

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

The charts below give information about a public library in a town called Little Chalfont.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

 

Student answer (Band 5.0)

The charts shows us the information of a public library called Little Chalfont. It gives us various types of information.

On the beginning, the pie chart gives us information about the age of library members. Half of the chart is full of adults of age of 18-64 by 51. Then the remaining half are occupied by children about 22, young adults of 13-17 by 15, adults 65 and over by 12.

On the other hand, the percentage of loans is covered the most by children's fiction by 38% and other remaining by children's non-fiction and so on. The least percentage is covered by Children's DVD by 1%. The graph gives us information about the total number of loans from 2007 to 2016. From the bar graph, it is seen that the loan is highest in 2016 and lowest in 2007.

Overall, the charts gave us all the important ideas of Little Chalfont Library.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 5.0

The response covers the main features of the charts, but the analysis is quite superficial. While you identify the age groups and the loan trends, the reporting of data is often inaccurate or lacks clarity. For example, stating 'Half of the chart is full of adults' is imprecise, and the description of the loan percentages is confusing, as you mention 'children's fiction' and 'other remaining' without providing a clear overview of the data distribution. To reach a higher band, you must ensure that the data points are accurately transcribed and that the 'main features' are highlighted with more analytical comparisons rather than just listing numbers.

Coherence and Cohesion — Band 5.0

The essay is organised into paragraphs, which helps the reader follow the structure. However, the use of cohesive devices is mechanical and sometimes inappropriate. Phrases like 'On the beginning' and 'On the other hand' are used incorrectly or do not logically connect the ideas presented. The progression of information is somewhat disjointed, particularly when moving between the pie chart and the bar graph. Improving the use of linking words and ensuring that each paragraph has a clear focus would significantly enhance the flow of your writing.

Lexical Resource — Band 5.0

The vocabulary is limited and repetitive, relying heavily on basic phrases like 'gives us information' and 'is covered by'. There is little attempt to use a wider range of vocabulary to describe trends or data. For instance, instead of saying 'the loan is highest', you could use more precise terms like 'peaked' or 'reached a maximum'. Additionally, there are issues with word choice, such as 'On the beginning' instead of 'To begin with' or 'Initially'. Expanding your range of synonyms and learning collocations related to data description will help you achieve a higher score.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 5.0

The response contains a mix of simple sentence structures, but there are frequent grammatical errors that occasionally impede clarity. Examples include 'The charts shows us' (subject-verb agreement error) and 'the percentage of loans is covered the most by children's fiction' (awkward passive construction). There is a lack of complex sentence structures, and the punctuation is generally basic. To improve, focus on mastering subject-verb agreement, correct tense usage, and incorporating a variety of complex sentence forms, such as relative clauses or subordinating conjunctions, to demonstrate greater control.

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