Band 5.5 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer
Overall Band Score: 5.5 · Cambridge IELTS 20 · 2026-08-19
IELTS Writing Task 1 question
The charts below give information about a public library in a town called Little Chalfont.
Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
Student answer (Band 5.5)
The charts presents the data about a public library named Little Chalfont, about its number of loans, total loans by category and age group of library members. Looking at the data, it is apparent that library had mostly adult members and the number of loans also shows highest figure in 2016 about 25000.
Children and Adult fiction are accounted biggest share in total loans by category.
In 2016, out of 100 members 22 were children and 15 % were young adults, followed by remaining Adults 65 and over. Moreover, Children's DVDs, Young adults and Adult audio books flattened at 1%, 2%, 2% respectively, in total loans by category. However, the percentage grew to 6% for children's non-fiction and 13% for adult non-fiction.
Furthermore, Total number of loans were consistently increased from 15000 and reached to 21000 in 2011. However, the number dropped constantly to 19000 till 2013. Nevertheless, it again spiked each year to reach a number of 23000 in 2016.
AI examiner evaluation
| Criterion | Band |
|---|---|
| Task Achievement / Task Response | 5.5 |
| Coherence and Cohesion | 6.0 |
| Lexical Resource | 5.5 |
| Grammatical Range and Accuracy | 5.5 |
| Overall | 5.5 |
Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 5.5
You have successfully identified the main features of the charts, including the age demographics and the trends in loan numbers. However, the response lacks a clear overview or summary statement that synthesises the data effectively. While you mention that adult members were the majority, you could have better highlighted the contrast between the growth in loan numbers and the specific categories that dominated. Some data points, such as the 2016 loan figure of 25,000, appear to be misread from the graph, as the line graph clearly peaks at 23,000. Accuracy in data reporting is essential for a higher band score.
Coherence and Cohesion — Band 6.0
The essay is organised into logical paragraphs, which helps the reader follow the information. You use some cohesive devices such as 'Moreover', 'However', and 'Furthermore' to transition between ideas. However, the connection between sentences is sometimes mechanical, and the flow could be improved by using more varied linking phrases. Additionally, the referencing is occasionally unclear, such as in the second paragraph where the transition between age groups and categories feels slightly abrupt. Improving the logical progression between the different charts would enhance the overall coherence.
Lexical Resource — Band 5.5
You demonstrate an adequate range of vocabulary for the task, using terms like 'demographics', 'accounted for', and 'spiked'. However, there are some inaccuracies in word choice and collocation, such as 'flattened at 1%' and 'accounted biggest share'. The phrasing 'total number of loans were consistently increased' is also slightly unnatural. To reach a higher band, focus on using more precise academic vocabulary and ensuring that collocations are used correctly in context. The range is sufficient to communicate the main points, but lacks the flexibility and sophistication required for higher bands.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 5.5
You use a mix of simple and complex sentence structures, which is appropriate for this task. There are several grammatical errors, such as subject-verb agreement issues ('The charts presents', 'library had mostly adult members') and missing articles ('the number of loans', 'in 2016 about 25000'). Additionally, the sentence 'Children and Adult fiction are accounted biggest share' is grammatically incorrect. While these errors do not significantly impede communication, they occur frequently enough to prevent a higher score. Focusing on proofreading for basic subject-verb agreement and article usage would significantly improve your accuracy.
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