Band 5.5 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer
Overall Band Score: 5.5 · Cambridge IELTS 20 · 2026-08-19
IELTS Writing Task 1 question
The charts below give information about a public library in a town called Little Chalfont.
Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
Student answer (Band 5.5)
The Data illustrates the information about a public library in a town called Little Chalfont where people of different ages have loans and the data is bifurcated accordingly.
The pie chart shows the proportion of various ages of people who are the members of the library. The lowest age group is of adults 65 and over with 12%. While the highest is 51% carries adults 18-64 age group peoples. The Children is 22% among all while the young adults 13-17 are only 15%.
The Table varies the percentage of loans was carried out in the year 2016 by different categories are fiction, non-fiction, DVD’s, and audio books. The highest is 38% of loans on fiction by children & adult both. While, the lowest loan percentage is on Children DVDs with only 1% and 2% on young adults and Adults audio books. Additionally, rest of the category had moderate loans which vary between 6% to 13%.
The Bars graphs shows the total number of loans carried out form year 2007 to 2016. In the initial year, there was only 15,000 loans which is the lowest number among all the year and got gradually increased between the range of 18,000 to 20,500 number of loans and reached to 21,000 in the year 2016.
Overall, it seems that the number of loans got increased moderately and the table shows percentage of loans in the little Chalfont Library of the last year which is divided into various category.
AI examiner evaluation
| Criterion | Band |
|---|---|
| Task Achievement / Task Response | 5.5 |
| Coherence and Cohesion | 5.5 |
| Lexical Resource | 5.5 |
| Grammatical Range and Accuracy | 5.5 |
| Overall | 5.5 |
Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 5.5
The response covers all three visual elements, identifying key features and making comparisons. However, the analysis is somewhat superficial. For instance, in the table section, you list percentages without clearly grouping or contrasting the data effectively to highlight the most significant trends. The overview is present but lacks a clear synthesis of the main trends across the three charts. To improve, focus on grouping data points (e.g., comparing the dominance of fiction loans against the minor categories) rather than simply listing figures. Ensure the overview highlights the most striking trend, such as the steady growth in total loans alongside the specific demographic preferences.
Coherence and Cohesion — Band 5.5
The essay is organized into logical paragraphs, each addressing a specific chart. There is a clear progression of ideas. However, the use of cohesive devices is sometimes mechanical or slightly inaccurate, such as 'The Table varies the percentage' (which is not the correct verb) or 'Additionally, rest of the category'. The referencing is generally clear, but the flow between sentences could be smoother. Using a wider variety of linking words and ensuring that transitions between paragraphs are more sophisticated would help improve the overall cohesion of the response.
Lexical Resource — Band 5.5
The vocabulary is adequate for the task but lacks precision and variety. There are several instances of awkward phrasing, such as 'the data is bifurcated accordingly' and 'The Table varies the percentage'. Some word choices are imprecise, such as 'carries adults' or 'form year 2007'. While the meaning is generally clear, the range of vocabulary is limited to basic descriptors. To reach a higher band, focus on using more precise academic collocations and avoiding repetitive sentence structures when describing data trends.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 5.5
The response contains a mix of simple and complex sentence structures. There are several grammatical errors, such as 'The Data illustrates the information' (unnecessary capitalization), 'The lowest age group is of adults 65 and over with 12%' (awkward phrasing), and 'the number of loans got increased' (incorrect verb choice). Punctuation is generally acceptable, but there are minor errors like 'DVD’s' (should be DVDs). While these errors do not impede communication, they occur frequently enough to prevent a higher score. Focus on subject-verb agreement and using more accurate verb tenses for describing past data.
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