Band 5.5 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer
Overall Band Score: 5.5 · Cambridge IELTS 20 · 2026-08-19
IELTS Writing Task 1 question
The charts below give information about a public library in a town called Little Chalfont.
Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
Student answer (Band 5.5)
Given graph demonstrate the information about, a public library namely "Little Chalfont". At a glance, In year 2016 ratio of library membership of adults, was much higher among all four different age groups.
To begin with, Library has seven different types of books category, and children's fiction & Adult fiction books was the highest loaned book, which was 38% in year 2016. While Childrens were not preferenig to have DVDs. further more, there is a significant change in total number of loans between year 2007 and 2016. in 2007 it was approximately 16000 books has been loaned while in year 2016 it was more than 22000 books. the same ration was noticed in 2011 as well. over the all the years from 2010, more than 20,000 books are loaned exept year 2013. The most of books are issued to the age group between 18 year old to 64 years old people, by Little Chalfont Library.
To sumup, Amoung all the years adults are more interested to read the books and their prefered categoty was Adult's fiction, however, adult audio books, young adults, and children's DVDs, was not prefered by any age group from year 2007 to 2016.
AI examiner evaluation
| Criterion | Band |
|---|---|
| Task Achievement / Task Response | 5.5 |
| Coherence and Cohesion | 5.5 |
| Lexical Resource | 5.5 |
| Grammatical Range and Accuracy | 5.5 |
| Overall | 5.5 |
Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 5.5
The response addresses the task by identifying main features and making comparisons. However, the analysis is somewhat superficial. While you mention the 2016 membership ratio and the increase in total loans, the description of the data is occasionally inaccurate or confusing (e.g., claiming 'Childrens were not preferenig to have DVDs' when the chart shows specific loan figures). The overview is present but lacks a clear synthesis of the trends. To improve, ensure that the data points cited are precise and that the comparison between categories is clearly linked to the provided charts rather than making general statements that are not fully supported by the visual evidence.
Coherence and Cohesion — Band 5.5
The essay is organised into paragraphs, which helps the reader follow the structure. However, the use of cohesive devices is often mechanical or misused. For example, 'To begin with' and 'further more' are used, but the logical flow between sentences is sometimes disjointed. The referencing is occasionally unclear, such as in the sentence 'the same ration was noticed in 2011 as well,' where the connection to previous data is vague. Improving the variety of linking words and ensuring that each paragraph has a clear, singular focus would significantly enhance the coherence of your writing.
Lexical Resource — Band 5.5
The vocabulary is adequate for the task but lacks precision and variety. There are several spelling errors, such as 'preferenig' instead of 'preferring', 'Amoung' instead of 'Among', and 'categoty' instead of 'category'. Additionally, the phrasing is often repetitive, relying on basic structures to describe the data. To reach a higher band, you should aim to use more sophisticated vocabulary related to trends and data analysis, such as 'fluctuated', 'peaked', or 'remained stable', and pay closer attention to spelling and word formation.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 5.5
The response contains a mix of simple and complex sentence structures, but there are frequent grammatical errors that occasionally impede clarity. Issues include subject-verb agreement (e.g., 'Children's fiction & Adult fiction books was the highest'), incorrect article usage, and punctuation errors. The sentence 'in 2007 it was approximately 16000 books has been loaned' is grammatically incorrect. To improve, focus on mastering basic subject-verb agreement and ensuring that your verb tenses are consistent when describing past data. Proofreading for minor slips in punctuation and capitalization will also help improve your score.
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