Band 4.5 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 4.5 · Cambridge IELTS 20 · 2026-08-19

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

The charts below give information about a public library in a town called Little Chalfont.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

 

Student answer (Band 4.5)

This charts give data about state run library in a town called little Chalfont.Books of mature adults more than children.

Age of library members different so that this library contain various books for diff ages individuals.

In 2007 minimum number of loan and in 2016 maximum number of loans.In between 2007 to 2016 number of loans fluctuate.

Total loans are dividends equally in adults and childrens upto 38% in fiction.But in non fiction children 6% and 13%.

In 2013 sudden decrease in the loan upto 19000 from 20500 which is increasing continuously.But after that in 2014 it increases again upto 21000.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 4.0

The response fails to meet the minimum word count requirement of 150 words, which significantly impacts the score. While you have attempted to identify some trends, the analysis is superficial and lacks a clear overview of the data. You have not adequately compared the categories or provided a cohesive summary of the main features. The description of the data is fragmented, and several key trends (such as the specific percentages for different age groups) are presented in a confusing manner. To improve, you must ensure you cover all parts of the prompt, provide a clear summary of the overall trends, and support your points with accurate data points while meeting the length requirement.

Coherence and Cohesion — Band 4.5

The response lacks logical organization and progression. The ideas are presented in short, disconnected sentences, and there is a lack of cohesive devices to link these ideas together. Paragraphing is not used effectively; the text appears as a series of disjointed observations rather than a structured report. The referencing is often unclear, making it difficult for the reader to follow the flow of information. To improve, you should group related information into distinct paragraphs and use linking words (e.g., 'furthermore', 'in contrast', 'consequently') to connect your sentences and ideas logically.

Lexical Resource — Band 4.5

The vocabulary is very limited and repetitive, relying on basic terms like 'number of loans' and 'increase'. There are several errors in word choice and phrasing, such as 'dividends equally' instead of 'divided equally' and 'diff ages individuals'. The lack of variety in your language makes the report sound simplistic. To achieve a higher score, you need to use a wider range of vocabulary, including synonyms and more precise terms to describe trends (e.g., 'fluctuate', 'decline', 'peak', 'proportion'). You should also focus on using correct collocations to ensure your writing sounds more natural and professional.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 4.5

There are frequent grammatical errors throughout the text, including missing articles ('This charts', 'in 2007 minimum number'), incorrect verb forms, and sentence fragments. The sentence structures are simple and lack the complexity required for higher bands. Punctuation is also inconsistent, with missing spaces after periods. These errors occasionally impede the clarity of your message. To improve, focus on basic sentence construction, ensuring every sentence has a clear subject and verb. Practice using complex structures, such as relative clauses or subordinating conjunctions, and pay closer attention to subject-verb agreement and the correct use of articles.

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