Band 5.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer
Overall Band Score: 5.0 · Cambridge IELTS 20 · 2026-08-21
IELTS Writing Task 1 question
The charts below give information about a public library in a town called Little Chalfont.
Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
Student answer (Band 5.0)
The given pie chart illustrates the information about the public library in little Chalfont and bar chart reflected the information about the total number of loans between 2007 to 2016.
Overall, in little Chalfont library there are four types of age group like, children, adults between 13 to 17, adults between 18 to 64, and 65 and over. The majority of the portion is occupied by the age group between 18 to 64. In the number of loans the least numbers of loans was recorded in the year 2007.
In 2016, little Chalfont library one fourth portion is occupied by the age between adults 65 and over and young adults 13 to 17. The half of the portion was shown by the age group between 18 to 64. In the loans category children's fiction and adult fiction was contributed by 38%. young adults and audio books was accounted for 2%. The smallest portion of loans was took up by children's DVDs which is followed by 1%.
In the bar chart the total number of loans the least number of loans were reported in the year 2007 with 15000 loans. By the time the number of loans gradually increase and in the year 2016 it was made up by biggest number with
AI examiner evaluation
| Criterion | Band |
|---|---|
| Task Achievement / Task Response | 5.0 |
| Coherence and Cohesion | 5.5 |
| Lexical Resource | 5.0 |
| Grammatical Range and Accuracy | 5.0 |
| Overall | 5.0 |
Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 5.0
The response attempts to cover the main features of the charts, but it fails to complete the task as the final sentence is cut off mid-thought. While you identify some data points, the reporting is inconsistent. For instance, you mention 'one fourth' for two different age groups in 2016, but the data interpretation lacks precision. Furthermore, the comparison between the categories in the bar chart is confusing, and the failure to finish the summary significantly impacts the overall task completion. To improve, ensure you provide a clear overview of the trends and select only the most significant data points to support your summary, ensuring the response is fully concluded.
Coherence and Cohesion — Band 5.5
The essay is organised into paragraphs, which is a positive step. However, the logical progression is hindered by awkward phrasing and a lack of cohesive devices. Transitions between sentences are often mechanical or missing, making the text feel like a list of observations rather than a cohesive report. For example, the shift from the pie chart to the bar chart is abrupt. Using linking words like 'In contrast,' 'Furthermore,' or 'Regarding the bar chart' would help guide the reader more effectively. Additionally, the referencing is sometimes unclear, making it difficult to follow the relationship between the data points presented.
Lexical Resource — Band 5.0
The vocabulary is somewhat limited and repetitive. You rely heavily on basic structures like 'is occupied by' or 'is contributed by'. There are also issues with word choice and collocation, such as 'the smallest portion of loans was took up by', which is grammatically incorrect and stylistically weak. To reach a higher band, you should aim to use more precise terminology related to data description, such as 'accounted for', 'constituted', or 'represented'. Expanding your range of verbs and adjectives to describe trends—such as 'fluctuated', 'peaked', or 'remained stable'—will significantly enhance the quality of your writing.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 5.0
The response contains frequent grammatical errors that occasionally impede clarity. There are issues with subject-verb agreement, such as 'bar chart reflected' (should be 'reflects') and 'least numbers of loans was recorded'. The use of articles is also inconsistent, and sentence structures are generally simple. The final sentence is incomplete, which is a major grammatical and structural failure. To improve, focus on mastering basic tense consistency—using the past tense for historical data—and ensure that your sentences have a clear subject and verb. Practising complex sentence structures, such as using relative clauses, will also help improve your score.
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