Band 6.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer
Overall Band Score: 6.0 · Cambridge IELTS 20 · 2026-08-21
IELTS Writing Task 1 question
The charts below give information about a public library in a town called Little Chalfont.
Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
Student answer (Band 6.0)
The given pie chart illustrates the information about the public library in little Chalfont, and the chart reflected the information about the total number of loans between 2007 to 2016.
Overall, in Little Chalfont library there are four types of age group such as, children, adults between 13 to 17, adults between 18 to 64, and 65 and over. The majority of the portion is occupied by the age group between 18 to 64. In the number of loans, the least numbers of loans was recorded in the year 2007.
In 2016, Little Chalfont library one fourth portion is occupied by the age between adults 65 and over and young adults 13 to 17. The half of the portion was shown by the age group between 18 to 64. In the loans category children's fiction and adult fiction was contributed by 38%. young adults and audio books was accounted for 2%. The smallest portion of loans was taken up by children's DVDs which is followed by 1%.
In the bar chart the total number of loans the least number of loans were reported in the year 2007 with 15000 loans. By the time the number of loans gradually increase and in the year 2016 it was made up by biggest number with almost 22,000 loans.
AI examiner evaluation
| Criterion | Band |
|---|---|
| Task Achievement / Task Response | 6.0 |
| Coherence and Cohesion | 6.0 |
| Lexical Resource | 6.0 |
| Grammatical Range and Accuracy | 5.5 |
| Overall | 6.0 |
Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 6.0
The response covers the main features of both charts, including the age demographics and the loan trends over time. However, the analysis is somewhat mechanical and lacks a clear, cohesive overview that synthesizes the data effectively. While you identify the main trends, such as the growth in loans and the dominance of the 18-64 age group, some of the data reporting is slightly confusing, particularly the phrasing regarding the 2016 age distribution. To reach a higher band, ensure that comparisons are more explicit and that the 'overview' paragraph provides a clearer summary of the most significant trends rather than just listing details.
Coherence and Cohesion — Band 6.0
The essay is organized into logical paragraphs, which helps the reader follow the structure. However, the use of cohesive devices is somewhat repetitive and occasionally mechanical (e.g., 'In the number of loans', 'In the loans category'). The transition between the two charts could be smoother to create a more unified report. While the progression of ideas is generally clear, the referencing is sometimes imprecise, such as in the third paragraph where the connection between the age groups and the loan percentages is slightly muddled. Improving the variety of linking words would enhance the flow.
Lexical Resource — Band 6.0
You have a sufficient range of vocabulary to convey the information, using terms like 'majority', 'occupied', and 'gradually increase'. However, there are some inaccuracies in word choice and collocation, such as 'the chart reflected the information' (the chart 'illustrates' or 'shows') and 'it was made up by biggest number' (it 'reached its peak'). There is also some repetition of basic structures. To improve, focus on using more precise academic vocabulary to describe trends and proportions, and ensure that your word choices are natural in the context of data reporting.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 5.5
The response uses a mix of simple and complex sentence structures. There are several grammatical errors, such as 'the least numbers of loans was recorded' (subject-verb agreement) and 'children's fiction and adult fiction was contributed by 38%' (passive voice misuse). Punctuation is generally functional, but there are minor errors in capitalization and phrasing. While these errors do not significantly impede communication, they occur frequently enough to prevent a higher score. Focusing on subject-verb agreement and the correct use of passive voice for data description will help improve your accuracy.
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