Band 6.5 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 6.5 · Cambridge IELTS 20 · 2026-08-21

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

The charts below give information about a public library in a town called Little Chalfont.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

 

Student answer (Band 6.5)

The pie chart illustrates the percentages of library members across four age groups, while the table and bar chart depicts the total loans by category and the total number of loans from 2007 to 2016.

Overall, adults accounted for the largest share as library members. while the largest proportion of loan was taken on children's and adult's fiction books. The total number of loans was fluctuated throughout the period, but peaked by the end.

Among library members, adults in the 18-64 age group constituted the largest share, at 51%, compared to children, at 22%. Young adults and adults 65 and over recorded the lowest proportions, at 15% and 12%.

The total loans taken on children's fiction and adult's fiction books stood at 38% each, representing the dominant categories. Adult non-fiction books ranked second, at 13%, opposed to children's non-fiction at 6%. The remaining remained at around 1-2%. In 2007, the lowest number of loans taken, numbering at just above 15,000. This figure then fluctuated at just below 20,000 and approximately 21,000 by 2015 before reaching a peak of around 22,000 by 2016.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 6.5

The response successfully addresses all parts of the task by summarizing the main features of the library data. You have identified the key age demographics, the most popular loan categories, and the trend in total loans over time. The overview is clear and provides a good summary of the main trends. However, the report could be improved by making more explicit comparisons between the categories, such as noting that the combined fiction categories account for over three-quarters of all loans. The data is accurately reported, and the inclusion of specific figures supports your points well, meeting the requirements for a Band 7 score.

Coherence and Cohesion — Band 6.5

The response is logically organized with a clear introduction, overview, and body paragraphs. Each paragraph focuses on a specific aspect of the data, which aids readability. Cohesive devices such as 'while', 'compared to', and 'in contrast' are used effectively to link ideas. However, there are minor issues with punctuation and sentence structure, such as the sentence fragment 'while the largest proportion of loan was taken on children's and adult's fiction books' which should be connected to the previous sentence. Despite these minor mechanical issues, the progression of information is clear throughout the text.

Lexical Resource — Band 6.0

You have used a sufficient range of vocabulary to describe the data, including terms like 'accounted for', 'constituted', 'dominant categories', and 'fluctuated'. There is an attempt to use less common vocabulary, which is generally successful. However, there are some minor inaccuracies in word choice and collocation, such as 'The total number of loans was fluctuated' (should be 'fluctuated') and 'The remaining remained' (which is repetitive). Despite these small errors, the vocabulary is adequate for the task and does not impede communication, justifying a Band 6.5, rounded to 6.0.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 6.0

The response demonstrates a mix of simple and complex sentence structures. While you have successfully used complex sentences, there are several grammatical errors that persist. For example, 'The total number of loans was fluctuated' is a passive voice error, and 'numbering at just above 15,000' is a fragment. Additionally, there are minor errors in subject-verb agreement and article usage. While these errors do not impede the overall meaning of the report, they occur frequently enough to prevent a higher band score. Focusing on proofreading for verb tense consistency and sentence completeness will help improve your accuracy.

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