Band 5.5 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer
Overall Band Score: 5.5 · Cambridge IELTS 20 · 2026-08-21
IELTS Writing Task 1 question
The charts below give information about a public library in a town called Little Chalfont.
Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
Student answer (Band 5.5)
The given pie chart and bar graph illustrates the information about a public library which is situated in town known as little chalfront. The data has been calibrated in a percentage.
Overall, it is crystal clear that manimum members of library belongs to adult age group. While people who are above 65 are minimum in library. Moreover, manimum loans were issued in last year and minimum in initial year.
To begin with, the participation of children was 22 in library, while members above 65 were 12. Moreover, teenagers and adults between 18-64 have large difference in participation, which was recorded as 36. In addition to this, children's fiction who had a loan was recorded as 38% which was similar as adult fiction. Similarly, young adult's and adult audio books was of same proportions in 2016.
Moving towards next information, children's non-fiction was half of proportion as compare to non-fiction. Children's DVDs was minimum who had a loans. At last, number of loans in 2003 was approximately 16,000. Afterward it started increasing and reached about 22,000 loans in 2011. However, in 2016 it had as very slight increase as compare to 2017.
AI examiner evaluation
| Criterion | Band |
|---|---|
| Task Achievement / Task Response | 5.5 |
| Coherence and Cohesion | 5.5 |
| Lexical Resource | 5.5 |
| Grammatical Range and Accuracy | 5.5 |
| Overall | 5.5 |
Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 5.5
The response covers the main features of both the pie chart and the bar graph. However, the analysis is somewhat superficial and contains inaccuracies. For instance, you mention 'manimum' (maximum) members belong to the adult age group, but the data shows 36% for adults, which is not the highest category if you consider the combined data or specific segments. Furthermore, the description of the bar graph trends is confusing, particularly the final sentence regarding 2016 and 2017, which does not clearly reflect the provided data. To improve, ensure you accurately interpret the figures and provide a more precise comparison between the categories rather than just listing numbers.
Coherence and Cohesion — Band 5.5
The essay is organized into logical paragraphs, which helps the reader follow the structure. You use some cohesive devices like 'To begin with', 'Moreover', and 'Moving towards next information' to transition between ideas. However, the flow is occasionally hindered by awkward phrasing and unclear referencing. For example, the phrase 'Moving towards next information' is not standard academic English. Additionally, some sentences lack clear logical connections, making the progression of ideas feel mechanical rather than fluid. Improving the variety and accuracy of linking words will help achieve a higher band score.
Lexical Resource — Band 5.5
The vocabulary is generally adequate for the task but lacks precision and variety. There are several spelling errors, such as 'manimum' instead of 'maximum' and 'chalfront' instead of 'Chalfont'. You rely on basic descriptors like 'minimum' and 'large difference' rather than using more sophisticated vocabulary to describe trends or proportions. To reach a higher band, focus on using more precise terminology for data reporting, such as 'proportion', 'fluctuated', 'accounted for', or 'a significant majority'. Expanding your range of collocations will also help improve the overall quality of your writing.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 5.5
The response contains a mix of simple and some complex sentence structures, but there are frequent grammatical errors that occasionally impede clarity. Common issues include subject-verb agreement (e.g., 'The given pie chart and bar graph illustrates'), incorrect article usage, and awkward sentence construction (e.g., 'children's DVDs was minimum who had a loans'). Punctuation is generally functional, but the misuse of singular/plural forms and prepositions is noticeable. To improve, focus on proofreading for basic agreement errors and practice constructing more complex sentences with accurate subordinate clauses.
See this exact question answered at other band scores — the same prompt compared across bands.
Browse more IELTS Writing model answers or get your own writing scored by the same AI examiner.