Band 5.5 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer
Overall Band Score: 5.5 · Cambridge IELTS 20 · 2026-08-21
IELTS Writing Task 1 question
The charts below give information about a public library in a town called Little Chalfont.
Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
Student answer (Band 5.5)
The given pie chart and bar graph illustrates the information about a public library which is situated in town known as little chalfront. The data has been calibrated in a percentage.
Overall, it is crystal clear that manimum members of library belongs to adult age group. while people who are above 65 are minimum in library. Moreover, manimum loans were issued in last year and minimum in initial year.
To begin with, the participation of children was 22 in library. while members above 60 were 12. Moreover, teenagers and adults between 18-64 have large difference in participation, which was recorded as 36.
In addition to this, children's fiction who had a loan was recorded as 38%. which was similar as adult fiction. Similarly, young adult's and adult audio books was of same proportion in 2016.
Moving towards rest of the information, children's non-fiction was half of proportion as compare to adult non-fiction. Children's DVDs was minimum who had a loan.
At last, the number of loans in 2003 was approximately 16,000. Afterward it started increasing and reached about 22,000 loans in 2011. However, in 2016 it had a very slight increase as compare to 2017.
AI examiner evaluation
| Criterion | Band |
|---|---|
| Task Achievement / Task Response | 5.5 |
| Coherence and Cohesion | 5.5 |
| Lexical Resource | 5.0 |
| Grammatical Range and Accuracy | 5.0 |
| Overall | 5.5 |
Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 5.5
The response covers the main features of the charts, but the analysis is inconsistent. While you identify key trends, some data points are inaccurate or poorly explained. For instance, you mention 'manimum' (maximum) members belong to the adult age group, but the data labels are not clearly linked to the percentages. Additionally, the comparison of loan numbers in 2016 and 2017 is confusing, as the bar chart only shows data up to 2016. The summary of the pie chart is somewhat disjointed, and the connection between the categories and the percentages could be more precise to ensure the reader fully understands the data presented.
Coherence and Cohesion — Band 5.5
The essay is organised into paragraphs, which helps the flow. However, the use of cohesive devices is often mechanical or inaccurate. Phrases like 'Moving towards rest of the information' and 'At last' feel unnatural in an academic report. There are also issues with referencing; for example, 'which was similar as adult fiction' lacks a clear subject. The logical progression is occasionally interrupted by abrupt transitions between the pie chart data and the bar graph data, making the overall structure feel somewhat disjointed rather than a cohesive summary of the provided information.
Lexical Resource — Band 5.0
The range of vocabulary is limited and repetitive. You frequently use 'minimum' and 'manimum' (likely a misspelling of maximum) to describe data, which lacks precision. There are also several errors in word choice and collocation, such as 'calibrated in a percentage' and 'children's fiction who had a loan'. These errors occasionally make the meaning slightly unclear. To reach a higher band, you should aim to use more varied vocabulary to describe trends, such as 'fluctuated', 'peaked', or 'accounted for', and ensure that your terminology for data categories is accurate.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 5.0
The response contains a mix of simple and complex sentence structures, but there are frequent grammatical errors. Common issues include incorrect article usage (e.g., 'in town known as little chalfront'), subject-verb agreement errors (e.g., 'The given pie chart and bar graph illustrates'), and punctuation mistakes, such as unnecessary full stops in the middle of sentences. While these errors do not completely prevent communication, they are frequent enough to distract the reader. You need to focus on basic sentence construction and proofreading for subject-verb agreement and article placement to improve your accuracy.
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