Band 5.5 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer
Overall Band Score: 5.5 · Cambridge IELTS 20 · 2026-08-21
IELTS Writing Task 1 question
The charts below give information about a public library in a town called Little Chalfont.
Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
Student answer (Band 5.5)
The pie chart gives information about age of library members with their loan at the little Chalfont library in 2016. The bar chart provides total number of loans from [redacted phone].
Overall the library has 51% members within the age group 18-64, while 12% adults with age 65+. The library loan has been increased from [redacted phone] and remained almost average till 2016.
The library has loan with different categories; 22% children has 45% total loan in 2016. 38% loans on children's fiction, 6% on children's non fiction and 1% on children's DVDs. The 15% members of library are young adults from age 13-17, who have only 2% loan, categorically less than all the age group members. The 51% adults member in library has 53% of loan; 38% on adult fiction, 13% on adult non-fiction and remaining 2% on adult audio books.
The bar charts shows the library's total number of loans in 10 years. Initially in 2007, the library has about 15,500 loan, which has increased to 22000 till 2011. This
AI examiner evaluation
| Criterion | Band |
|---|---|
| Task Achievement / Task Response | 5.5 |
| Coherence and Cohesion | 5.5 |
| Lexical Resource | 5.5 |
| Grammatical Range and Accuracy | 5.5 |
| Overall | 5.5 |
Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 5.5
The response covers the main features of the charts, including the age demographics and the trend in total loans. However, the report is incomplete as it cuts off mid-sentence at the end. While the key features are identified, the analysis of the data is somewhat mechanical, listing percentages without always providing a clear synthesis or comparison. For example, the relationship between the age groups and their respective loan percentages is stated, but the comparison could be more analytical. To improve, ensure all data points are fully integrated into a cohesive summary and avoid abrupt endings, as this prevents a full overview of the data.
Coherence and Cohesion — Band 5.5
The essay is organised into paragraphs, which helps the reader follow the information. However, the progression of ideas is somewhat disjointed. The use of cohesive devices is limited and occasionally repetitive (e.g., 'The library has...'). The transition between the description of the pie chart and the bar chart is abrupt. Furthermore, the sudden termination of the text at the end significantly impacts the overall coherence of the response. To improve, use a wider variety of linking words and ensure that each paragraph flows logically into the next, providing a clear structure from introduction to conclusion.
Lexical Resource — Band 5.5
The vocabulary is generally adequate for the task, allowing the student to convey basic information about percentages and trends. However, there is a lack of variety and some inaccuracies in collocation, such as 'remained almost average' and 'categorically less than'. The phrasing is often repetitive, relying heavily on simple structures like 'The library has...'. To reach a higher band, the student should incorporate more precise vocabulary related to data trends, such as 'fluctuated', 'peaked', or 'remained stable', and avoid repeating the same sentence structures throughout the report.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 5.5
The response contains a mix of simple and complex sentence structures. There are several grammatical errors, such as 'age of library members with their loan' (should be 'age of library members and their loans') and '51% adults member' (should be '51% of adult members'). Punctuation is generally functional, but the incomplete final sentence is a significant issue. While the errors do not completely impede communication, they are frequent enough to suggest a lack of control over more complex grammatical forms. Focusing on subject-verb agreement and pluralisation would help improve accuracy.
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