Band 6.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 6.0 · Cambridge IELTS 20 · 2026-08-21

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

The charts below give information about a public library in a town called Little Chalfont.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

 

Student answer (Band 6.0)

The given illustration includes one pie chart, one table, and one bar graph, each of which represents different information on the Little Chalfont library.

The pie chart illustrates the proportions of members in this library based on their ages in 2016, the table compares the percentages of loans across different categories of this library in the year 2016, and the bar graph depicts the total number of loans.

Overall, one of the most striking features when looking at the data is that the majority of the library members were adults. In addition, except for the first year, this library had around 20,000 loans annually; especially in the year 2016, most of the total loans were for children's and adult fiction books.

Out of the mentioned number of loans, 76% were for borrowing either children's fiction or adult fiction, at 38% ,outnumbering the other genres of books by a wide gap.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 5.0

The response addresses the task but fails to provide a comprehensive overview of all data sets. While you mention the pie chart, table, and bar graph, the analysis is incomplete. You focus heavily on the 2016 loan percentages but neglect to describe the trends in the bar graph over the years provided (2012–2016) or the specific age demographics beyond a general statement. To reach a higher band, you must report on the main features of all charts, including significant changes or trends over time, rather than just selecting a few isolated figures. The summary is currently too brief to fully cover the requirements of the prompt.

Coherence and Cohesion — Band 6.0

The essay is organised into logical paragraphs, which helps the reader follow the structure. You use some cohesive devices, such as 'In addition' and 'Overall', to link ideas. However, the progression of information is somewhat mechanical. The transition between the introduction and the body paragraphs is clear, but the final paragraph feels abrupt and lacks a concluding synthesis of the data. To improve, ensure that each paragraph has a clear focus and that you use a wider variety of linking words to connect sentences more fluidly throughout the response.

Lexical Resource — Band 6.0

The vocabulary used is adequate for the task, with terms like 'proportions', 'depicts', and 'outnumbering' used correctly. However, the range is somewhat limited and repetitive. You rely on basic descriptors and could benefit from using more precise academic vocabulary to describe data trends, such as 'fluctuated', 'remained stable', or 'accounted for'. There are no significant spelling errors, and the vocabulary is generally appropriate for the context, but it lacks the sophistication and flexibility required for a higher band score.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 6.0

The response demonstrates a mix of simple and complex sentence structures. Most sentences are grammatically accurate, and the meaning is always clear. There are no major errors that impede communication. However, the range of structures is limited; you rely heavily on simple 'subject-verb-object' patterns. To achieve a higher score, you should incorporate a greater variety of complex structures, such as relative clauses or passive voice constructions, to describe the data more effectively. Punctuation is generally accurate, though there is a minor spacing error before the comma in '38% ,outnumbering'.

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