Band 5.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer
Overall Band Score: 5.0 · Cambridge IELTS 20 · 2026-08-21
IELTS Writing Task 1 question
The charts below give information about a public library in a town called Little Chalfont.
Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
Student answer (Band 5.0)
The charts below give information about a public library in a town called Little Chalfont.
According to the chart the number of loans were shown in the table in 2016 childrens fiction was 38%, childrens non-fiction was 6%, childrens DVDs was 1% and young adults was 2%, adult fiction was 38%, adult non-fiction was 13%, adult audio books was 2%.
According to the age of library members in 2016 was shown in the circle childrens were 22%, young adults from age 13-17 were 15%, adults from age 18-64 were 51% and adults age from 65 and over were 12%.
Total number of loans from [redacted phone] shown in the graph that showed in 2007 the amount of loan was 16,000. In 2008 the amount of loan was 18,000. In 2009 the amount of loan was taken 18,000. In 2010 the amount of loan was 21,000. in 2011 the amount of loan was 21,500 and in 2012 the amount of loan was 21,000. In 2013 the amount of loan was 19,500. In 2014 the amount of loan was 21,000. In 2015 the amount of loan was 21,500. In 2016 the amount of loan was 22,000.
Conculsion according to the chart adults age from 18-64 were the mostly members of library and number of loans are taken from [redacted phone] was from 16,000 to 22000.
AI examiner evaluation
| Criterion | Band |
|---|---|
| Task Achievement / Task Response | 5.0 |
| Coherence and Cohesion | 5.0 |
| Lexical Resource | 5.0 |
| Grammatical Range and Accuracy | 5.0 |
| Overall | 5.0 |
Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 5.0
The response attempts to cover all three charts, but it fails to provide a meaningful summary or synthesis of the data. Instead of selecting and reporting main features, the student provides a repetitive, list-like recitation of almost every figure provided in the charts. There is no attempt to make relevant comparisons, such as noting that adult fiction and children's fiction share the same percentage, or highlighting the overall upward trend in loans. The 'Conclusion' is merely a restatement of facts rather than an analytical summary. To improve, you must group data logically and highlight key trends or significant differences rather than listing every individual data point.
Coherence and Cohesion — Band 5.0
The essay is divided into paragraphs, which helps the reader navigate the information. However, the progression of ideas is mechanical and repetitive. Each paragraph starts with a similar, clunky phrase like 'According to the chart...' or 'Total number of loans...'. There is a lack of cohesive devices to link ideas; for example, the paragraph on loans is a series of simple sentences that read like a list. The use of referencing is also weak, as the text relies on repetitive sentence structures rather than varied transition words or pronouns to connect the information.
Lexical Resource — Band 5.0
The vocabulary is quite limited and repetitive. The phrase 'amount of loan' is used repeatedly throughout the third paragraph, which is not the most natural collocation; 'number of loans' or 'loan figures' would be more appropriate. There is little evidence of a range of vocabulary beyond basic descriptive terms. To reach a higher band, you should incorporate more precise terminology related to data description, such as 'fluctuated', 'peaked', 'accounted for', or 'constituted', and avoid repeating the same nouns and verbs in every sentence.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 5.0
The response relies almost exclusively on simple sentence structures. There are frequent grammatical errors, such as subject-verb agreement issues ('the number of loans were shown', 'childrens were 22%') and incorrect punctuation. The use of 'childrens' as a plural is incorrect; it should be 'children'. Additionally, there are errors in tense and preposition usage. While the meaning is generally clear, the lack of complex structures and the persistence of basic grammatical errors limit the score. You should focus on using a wider variety of sentence types and ensuring correct pluralization and verb agreement.
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