Band 5.5 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer
Overall Band Score: 5.5 · Cambridge IELTS 20 · 2026-08-21
IELTS Writing Task 1 question
The charts below give information about a public library in a town called Little Chalfont.
Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
Student answer (Band 5.5)
In the circle graph it gives us the ratio of different library members and each members consisted of different age groups of Public Library which was situated in Little Chalfont. And on the other the bar graph informed about the total loans by categories from the year of 2007 towards the 2016.
Firstly, we witness in the circle graph is that mostly library members of the public library were Adults and there ages were 18 to 64 years old old and their contribution to library was 51 percent which was a very impressive ratio and than moving towards the lower percentage it included children which was 22 percentage and it reflected the interest of children in reading books and than at the end it included two categories in which it contained young adults and adults which were over 65 years old age. And in this younger adults were 15 percent and over 65 years old adults were 12 percent.
Secondly, we noticed in the bar graph that there were many fluctuations from 2007 to the 2016. But in 2007 there was only 15,000 loans and this was the lowest recorded loans ever and in 2016 there was 22,000 loans and this was the top ranked record.
And then there was a list mentioned in which total loans by category was mentioned in 2016. In this there was a high percent of children's fiction and it was 38 percent and the lowest percent was Children's DVDs
AI examiner evaluation
| Criterion | Band |
|---|---|
| Task Achievement / Task Response | 5.5 |
| Coherence and Cohesion | 5.5 |
| Lexical Resource | 5.5 |
| Grammatical Range and Accuracy | 5.5 |
| Overall | 5.5 |
Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 5.5
The response covers the main features of the charts, but the analysis is somewhat superficial. While you identify the age groups and the loan trends, the comparisons are underdeveloped. For instance, you mention the 2007 and 2016 loan figures but fail to describe the trend between those years effectively. Additionally, the final paragraph regarding the 2016 category breakdown is disjointed and lacks a clear connection to the rest of the report. To improve, ensure you group data logically and provide a more comprehensive overview of the trends rather than just listing isolated figures.
Coherence and Cohesion — Band 5.5
The essay is organized into paragraphs, but the flow between ideas is often mechanical and repetitive. You rely heavily on basic transition words like 'Firstly', 'Secondly', and 'And then'. Some sentences are poorly connected, such as the transition into the final paragraph about the 2016 category breakdown, which feels like an afterthought. The use of referencing is also weak; for example, 'In this there was a high percent' is vague. Improving the use of cohesive devices and ensuring a smoother logical progression between sentences would significantly enhance the readability of your report.
Lexical Resource — Band 5.5
The vocabulary is generally adequate for the task but lacks the precision required for a higher band. You use repetitive phrasing, such as 'there was' and 'it included', which limits the sophistication of your writing. There are also some awkward collocations, such as 'top ranked record' and 'ratio of different library members'. While your meaning is clear, you need to incorporate a wider range of vocabulary related to data description, such as 'fluctuated', 'peaked', or 'accounted for', to demonstrate a more flexible control of language.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 5.5
The response contains a mix of simple and complex sentence structures, but there are frequent grammatical errors. Issues include incorrect verb tenses ('each members consisted'), subject-verb agreement errors ('there ages were'), and awkward phrasing ('the year of 2007 towards the 2016'). Punctuation is also inconsistent, with some run-on sentences. While these errors do not completely impede communication, they are frequent enough to detract from the overall quality. Focusing on subject-verb agreement and refining your sentence structure will help you achieve a higher score.
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