Band 4.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 4.0 · Cambridge IELTS 20 · 2026-08-22

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

The charts below give information about a public library in a town called Little Chalfont.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

 

Student answer (Band 4.0)

The charts gives the information of little Chalfont library of different years in various age of library members.

In 2007 the people get loan was more than 15,000 after one the numbers of people getting loan were slightly increased as a result, later there little changes occurs in these years in 2016 almost 20,000 or more than getting loan in distinct categories. The children fiction 38 percent all member those getting was little percentage and the adult community more getting loan as compared to others

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 4.0

The response fails to meet the minimum word count requirement of 150 words, which significantly impacts the task achievement. Because the response is only 85 words, the information is severely underdeveloped. While you attempt to identify some trends, such as the increase in loans by 2016, the summary is incomplete and lacks a clear overview of the main features. You have not adequately compared the categories or provided a comprehensive summary of the data presented in the charts. To improve, you must ensure you cover all parts of the prompt and provide a more detailed analysis of the data points.

Coherence and Cohesion — Band 4.0

The response lacks logical organization and progression. There is no clear paragraph structure, and the ideas are presented in a fragmented manner. The use of cohesive devices is minimal and often inaccurate, such as the phrase 'as a result' which does not logically connect the preceding information. The lack of transition words makes it difficult for the reader to follow the development of your argument. To improve, you should organize your report into clear paragraphs: an introduction, an overview, and body paragraphs that group related data points together using appropriate linking words.

Lexical Resource — Band 4.0

The vocabulary is quite limited and repetitive, which restricts your ability to describe the data precisely. Phrases like 'people get loan' and 'little changes occurs' are grammatically incorrect and lack the precision required for an academic report. You rely on basic vocabulary that does not allow for a sophisticated description of the trends shown in the charts. To improve, focus on learning topic-specific vocabulary related to data description, such as 'fluctuate', 'significant increase', 'proportion', and 'category'. Expanding your range of synonyms will help you avoid repetition and improve the quality of your writing.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 4.0

There are frequent grammatical errors throughout the text that impede communication. Examples include 'The charts gives' (subject-verb agreement), 'the people get loan was' (incorrect tense and structure), and 'there little changes occurs' (missing verb/article). The sentence structures are simple and often lack proper punctuation, making the text difficult to read. You should focus on mastering basic sentence construction, subject-verb agreement, and the correct use of articles. Practicing the use of complex sentences, such as using relative clauses or subordinating conjunctions, will also help you move toward a higher band score.

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