Band 6.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer
Overall Band Score: 6.0 · Cambridge IELTS 20 · 2026-08-22
IELTS Writing Task 1 question
The charts below give information about a public library in a town called Little Chalfont.
Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
Student answer (Band 6.0)
The charts below delineates the information of member's of Little Chalfont Library regarding the age group, of the categories of books in which loan is taken in year 2016 and last but not least the total number of loans taken by the members during different years respectively.
As far as age of the members was concerned, it was found that lions share and rats share was covered by adults age 16-64 and adults over 65 respectively. children almost covered the one fifth population of the library. At last, young adults aged 13-17 were found at the rock bottom position.
Moving towards the popularity of books, the chart illustrates that the largest number of loans around 38% were taken on children's fiction and adult fiction books. Then, the second popular book in terms of loan taken was adult non-fiction with 13%. children's non-fiction were seen at the third place with around 6% of loan. Thereafter, children's DVD's & and adult audio books were seen at the last with 1% & 2% respectively.
Analyzing the total number of loans every year, it was found that the amount of number of loans taken has increased from year [redacted phone] with increase of around 4000. The little increase was seen between year 2008 to 2011 then suddenly decrement was observed in year 2013.Therefore, in year 2014, 15, 16 the inclination in the trend was observed with the highest peak as in year 2016.
AI examiner evaluation
| Criterion | Band |
|---|---|
| Task Achievement / Task Response | 6.0 |
| Coherence and Cohesion | 6.0 |
| Lexical Resource | 5.5 |
| Grammatical Range and Accuracy | 5.5 |
| Overall | 6.0 |
Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 6.0
The response covers all three charts provided, identifying key features and making relevant comparisons. However, the analysis is somewhat superficial. For instance, the description of the age groups uses informal and imprecise idioms like 'lions share' and 'rats share', which are not appropriate for an academic report. While the main trends are identified, the data interpretation lacks precision; for example, stating 'children almost covered the one fifth population' is vague. To reach a higher band, you should focus on reporting specific data points more accurately and avoiding informal language, ensuring that the comparison between categories is more analytical rather than just listing figures.
Coherence and Cohesion — Band 6.0
The essay is logically organized into paragraphs, each focusing on a different chart. There is a clear progression of ideas from the introduction to the body paragraphs. However, the use of cohesive devices is sometimes mechanical or slightly awkward, such as 'At last' and 'Moving towards'. Additionally, some transitions between sentences feel forced. While the paragraphing is appropriate and the overall structure is clear, the range of cohesive devices could be more varied and natural to improve the flow of the text.
Lexical Resource — Band 5.5
The vocabulary is generally adequate for the task, but there are significant issues with word choice and collocation. The use of informal idioms like 'lions share' and 'rats share' is inappropriate for an academic task. Furthermore, there are errors in phrasing, such as 'delineates the information of member's' (should be 'members') and 'rock bottom position'. While you attempt to use a range of vocabulary, the lack of precision and the inclusion of non-academic expressions limit the score. Focusing on accurate terminology for data description, such as 'accounted for' or 'represented', would be beneficial.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 5.5
The response contains a mix of simple and complex sentence structures. However, there are frequent grammatical errors, including subject-verb agreement issues ('charts below delineates'), incorrect pluralization ('member's'), and awkward phrasing ('the amount of number of loans'). Punctuation is also inconsistent, particularly with the use of ampersands and unnecessary commas. While these errors do not completely impede communication, they occur frequently enough to impact the overall clarity of the writing. To improve, focus on proofreading for basic subject-verb agreement and ensuring that complex sentences are constructed accurately.
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