Band 6.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 6.0 · Cambridge IELTS 20 · 2026-08-22

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

The charts below give information about a public library in a town called Little Chalfont.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

 

Student answer (Band 6.0)

The chart illustrates the information about the age of library members ,total loans by category and total number of loans in a town called Little Chalfont.

Overall, category aged 18-64 accounted for the largest number of the library members. While, elders over age 65 represented the smallest. In terms of total loans, children`s fiction and adult fiction recorded the highest proportion respectively. Whereas, Children`s DVDs accounted for the smallest proportion. Regarding the total number of loans, the number fluctuated through out the given period , before reaching the highest level.

Adults aged 18-64 accounted for the largest number at, 51 of library members. This was followed by children and young adults age 13-17 accounted for the 22 library members. While, the group of adults aged 65 and over represent for the smallest number at, 12 members. In terms of loans by categories, children`s fiction and adult fiction experienced the largest proportion at, 38% each respectively. Additionally, children`s non-fiction and adult non fiction represented 6% and 13% respectively. This was followed by young adults and adult audio books at 2% each category respectively. Whereas, Children`s DVDs recorded the smallest proportion ,at 1% of total loans.

Regarding total number of loans between 2007 and 2016, the numbers fluctuated over all through out the given period starting at around 16000 in 2007, finishing at highest numbers of approximately 22000.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 6.0

You have successfully identified the main features of the charts, including the age demographics, loan categories, and the trend over time. You provided relevant data points to support your descriptions. However, the report could be improved by making more direct comparisons between the categories rather than just listing them. For example, noting that fiction loans combined account for over 75% of all loans would provide a more analytical perspective. Additionally, ensure that all data points are clearly linked to the charts provided, as some figures, such as the '51' for library members, lack clear units or context.

Coherence and Cohesion — Band 6.0

The response is logically organized into an introduction, body paragraphs, and a summary of trends. You use some cohesive devices such as 'In terms of,' 'Regarding,' and 'This was followed by' to guide the reader. However, the use of punctuation is occasionally distracting, particularly the unnecessary commas before numbers (e.g., 'at, 51'). Furthermore, some transitions feel slightly mechanical. Improving the flow between sentences by using a wider variety of linking words would enhance the overall coherence of the report.

Lexical Resource — Band 5.5

You demonstrate an adequate range of vocabulary for the task, using terms like 'proportion,' 'fluctuated,' and 'accounted for.' However, there are some repetitive phrasing patterns, such as the frequent use of 'respectively' and 'accounted for.' Additionally, there are minor errors in word choice and collocation, such as 'represent for' instead of 'represent' or 'account for.' To reach a higher band, try to incorporate more varied synonyms for describing trends and proportions to avoid repetitive sentence structures.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 5.5

You use a mix of simple and complex sentence structures. While the meaning is generally clear, there are frequent errors in punctuation and grammar. Specifically, the placement of commas is often incorrect (e.g., 'While, elders over age 65'), and there are issues with subject-verb agreement and article usage (e.g., 'accounted for the 22 library members'). Some sentences are slightly fragmented or awkward in their construction. Focusing on proofreading for basic grammatical accuracy and refining your use of complex sentence structures will help improve your score in this criterion.

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