Band 5.5 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer
Overall Band Score: 5.5 · Cambridge IELTS 20 · 2026-08-23
IELTS Writing Task 1 question
The charts below give information about a public library in a town called Little Chalfont.
Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
Student answer (Band 5.5)
The charts below shows the information of public library located in Little Chalfont .
Overall , the age group of library members of adults 18-64 had the highest number across others, while the total loans by category of children's fiction and adult fiction had the similar and highest percentage.Moreover, the total number of loans from 2007 to 2016 had the steadily growth with some fluctuation in the middle.
On the pie chart, the number of age group form 18-64 was accounted for the highest by 51 in 2016 , however, the adults over 65 was lowest by 12 . Children had 22 number of age group and Young adults 13 -17 at 15.
The total loans by different categories in 2016, children's factors and adult fiction had the proportion of 38% ,in contrast, Children'S DVDs and Young adults is accounted by 1 %.Furthermore, adult audio books and Young adults both by 2%,adult non-fiction at 13 % and Children's non-fiction by 6%. The total number of loans from 2007 to 2016 had continued growth from 15,000 and experienced some fluctuation in 2013 and reached over 20,000 in 2016.
AI examiner evaluation
| Criterion | Band |
|---|---|
| Task Achievement / Task Response | 5.5 |
| Coherence and Cohesion | 5.5 |
| Lexical Resource | 5.5 |
| Grammatical Range and Accuracy | 5.0 |
| Overall | 5.5 |
Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 5.5
The response covers all three charts provided, identifying key trends and data points. You successfully highlighted the dominant age group (18-64) and the most popular loan categories. However, the report lacks precision in data reporting. For instance, you mention '51' for the age group without specifying that this represents a percentage, and 'children's factors' is an inaccurate description of the category 'Children's fiction'. To improve, ensure you clearly label units (percentages vs. raw numbers) and use accurate terminology from the charts. While the main features are present, the comparison between categories could be more analytical rather than just listing figures.
Coherence and Cohesion — Band 5.5
The essay is organized into logical paragraphs, with an introduction, an overview, and body paragraphs focusing on specific charts. You use some cohesive devices like 'Moreover', 'however', and 'in contrast' to link ideas. However, the flow is occasionally mechanical, and some transitions feel forced. The referencing is sometimes unclear, such as in the second paragraph where you list numbers without sufficient context. To reach a higher band, focus on using a wider variety of linking words and ensure that each paragraph has a clear topic sentence that guides the reader through the data comparison.
Lexical Resource — Band 5.5
You demonstrate an adequate range of vocabulary for the task, using terms like 'proportion', 'fluctuation', and 'category'. However, there are instances of imprecise word choice, such as 'children's factors' instead of 'children's fiction' and 'had the steadily growth' instead of 'showed steady growth'. There are also some minor errors in word formation and capitalization, such as 'Children'S'. To improve, focus on using precise terminology found in the prompt and ensure correct word forms. Expanding your repertoire of verbs to describe trends (e.g., 'witnessed', 'experienced', 'peaked') would also enhance your score.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 5.0
The response uses a mix of simple and complex sentence structures. While the meaning is generally clear, there are frequent grammatical errors, such as 'The charts below shows' (subject-verb agreement), 'was accounted for the highest by 51' (awkward passive construction), and 'had the steadily growth' (incorrect article/adverb usage). Punctuation is also inconsistent, particularly with spacing around commas and periods. To improve, focus on subject-verb agreement and the correct use of articles. Proofreading for basic sentence structure errors will help ensure that your complex sentences are accurate and do not impede the reader's understanding.
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