Band 6.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 6.0 · Cambridge IELTS 20 · 2026-08-23

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

The charts below give information about a public library in a town called Little Chalfont.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

 

Student answer (Band 6.0)

The pie chart and tables provide data about a public library in a town known as Little Chalfont. From the given pie chart, The Adults with an age range between 18 to 64 are highest majority people in a public library.

Children's fiction and Adult fiction recorded with highest percentage of Total loans by category (2016) from the given table as well as the bar chart provides information of Total number of loans ( from 2007 to 2016) in the year 2016 recorded with maximum value above 20,000.

The pie chart, titled " Age of library members(2016) ", shows the following distribution: Children recorded with 22 members, Young adults 15, Adults ( between 18 - 64) recorded with highest among all distributions of 51, Adults (with the age 65 and over ) are 12.

The table and bar chart provides information of Total loans by category (2016) and Total number of loans ( 2007 - 2016). The table explains by categories are: Children's fiction 38% and Adult fiction 38% are listed top in a table, children's non fiction 6%, Children's DVDs 1% are lowest among all categories, Adult audio books and Young adults are 2%, Adult non-fiction 13%.

The bar chart illustrates Total number of loans from 2007 to 2016, Every year total number of loans are substantially arise in 2007 loans are listed with 16,000, 2008 and 2009 loans are remained constant with 19,000, In the year 2010 and 2011 are between 20,000 to 22,000. The next two coming years decreased to 21,000 and 19,000. From 2014 again increased by every year with10,000, In 2016 recorded with 23,000.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 6.0

You have successfully identified the main features of the charts and provided relevant comparisons. You covered the age distribution, loan categories, and the trend over time. However, the report lacks a clear overview or summary paragraph that synthesizes the data. Some data points are presented as a list rather than a cohesive analysis, such as the breakdown of the pie chart. To improve, ensure you group information logically and highlight the most significant trends rather than listing every individual figure, which can make the response feel like a data dump.

Coherence and Cohesion — Band 6.0

The essay is organized into paragraphs, which helps the reader follow the structure. However, the use of cohesive devices is somewhat mechanical and repetitive. For example, you frequently start sentences with 'The pie chart' or 'The table'. There is a lack of sophisticated linking words to connect ideas between sentences and paragraphs. The progression of information is generally logical, but the internal flow within paragraphs could be improved by using a wider variety of transition signals to show relationships between the data sets.

Lexical Resource — Band 6.0

You have a sufficient range of vocabulary to convey the information, though it is often repetitive. Phrases like 'recorded with' and 'provides information of' are used multiple times. There are also some inaccuracies in word choice, such as 'substantially arise' instead of 'showed a substantial increase' or 'rose significantly'. While the vocabulary is adequate for the task, it lacks the precision and variety required for a higher band score. Focusing on synonyms and more academic collocations would enhance your writing.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 5.5

You demonstrate a mix of simple and complex sentence structures. However, there are frequent grammatical errors that occasionally impede the flow of reading, such as 'are highest majority people' (should be 'make up the largest proportion') and 'Every year total number of loans are substantially arise'. Punctuation is also inconsistent, particularly with the placement of commas and parentheses. While your meaning is generally clear, the frequency of these errors prevents the writing from reaching a higher band. You should focus on subject-verb agreement and correct verb tense usage.

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