Band 5.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 5.0 · Cambridge IELTS 20 · 2026-08-23

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

The charts below give information about a public library in a town called Little Chalfont.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

 

Student answer (Band 5.0)

These bar charts illustarates a public library in a town called little Chalfont.

Overall, the little Chalfont library show the age of library members and total loans by category such as children, young adults, adults and adults over. in contrast, other chart illustrate the total number of loans and years.

According to the chart age of library members in 2016 highest figure adults 51 and the value of childern 22 while young adults value is 15 lowest figure adults 65 and over 12. whereas the total loans category 2016 children fiction 38% is the highest figure, children's non-fiction 6%, children's DVDs 1% is the lowest value while the young adults 2% adults fiction 38% and the proportion of adult non-fiction 13% adult audio books 2%.

secondly, the total number of loans [redacted phone]. in 2016 the number of loans is highest around 22,000 the higher value 2015 is 21,000 the lowest figure 16,000 in

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 5.0

The response attempts to cover the main features of the charts, but the presentation is fragmented and lacks a clear overview. While you identify some data points, the description of the 'total loans' category is confusing and lacks proper synthesis. The final paragraph is incomplete, ending abruptly without finishing the comparison of the loan trends. To improve, ensure you provide a clear summary of the main trends in the introduction and ensure all data points are clearly linked to the categories they represent. The lack of a concluding sentence or a fully developed final point limits the score.

Coherence and Cohesion — Band 5.0

The essay is divided into paragraphs, but the logical flow is weak. The use of cohesive devices is mechanical and sometimes inaccurate, such as the repetitive use of 'highest figure' and 'lowest figure'. Referencing is often unclear, making it difficult for the reader to follow which data point belongs to which category. The transition between the age of members and the loan categories is abrupt. Improving the use of linking words (e.g., 'furthermore', 'in contrast', 'consequently') and ensuring each paragraph has a clear topic sentence would significantly improve the coherence of your writing.

Lexical Resource — Band 5.0

The vocabulary is limited and repetitive. You rely heavily on basic terms like 'highest figure', 'lowest value', and 'number of'. There are also several spelling errors (e.g., 'illustarates', 'childern') and grammatical issues with word choice (e.g., 'adults over' is incomplete). To reach a higher band, you should incorporate a wider range of vocabulary to describe trends, such as 'peaked at', 'fluctuated', 'accounted for', or 'a significant proportion'. Precision in terminology is essential for Task 1 responses.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 5.0

The response contains frequent grammatical errors that occasionally impede clarity. There are issues with subject-verb agreement (e.g., 'charts illustarates', 'library show'), missing articles, and incomplete sentence structures. The punctuation is also inconsistent, particularly with the use of commas and periods. While there is an attempt to use complex structures, they are often faulty. Focusing on basic sentence construction and ensuring correct verb forms will help improve your accuracy. You should also proofread your work to catch simple errors like missing words or incorrect verb tenses.

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