Band 5.5 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer
Overall Band Score: 5.5 · Cambridge IELTS 20 · 2026-08-23
IELTS Writing Task 1 question
The charts below give information about a public library in a town called Little Chalfont.
Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
Student answer (Band 5.5)
The combination charts illustrate the data of people visits base upon their age to a public library in a town name Little Chalfont.
Overall, it is evident that adult are most common visitors while, the children and adult fiction are draw among the loan
loan category. Significantly, the total number of loans where increase over the period.
To begin with, there are distinct three charts, firstly, the pie chart provide information on the people who use base upon the ages where the adult are use the library most commonly by 51%. Additionally, the children and elders minimal among them approximately one-tenth of the porprotion.
Moving ahead, the tabular chart shows the total loans category in 2016 where both children and adult fiction are roughly 38% while non-fiction of both have a negligible share in it. Lastly, the total number of loans from 2007 to 2016 it fluctuate throughout the period with slight changes and end at 20.,000 in 2016.
AI examiner evaluation
| Criterion | Band |
|---|---|
| Task Achievement / Task Response | 5.5 |
| Coherence and Cohesion | 5.5 |
| Lexical Resource | 5.5 |
| Grammatical Range and Accuracy | 5.5 |
| Overall | 5.5 |
Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 5.5
The response covers all three charts, but the analysis is somewhat superficial. While you identify the main features, such as the dominance of adult visitors and the loan categories, the comparison between the charts is weak. For instance, you mention the total number of loans increased, but the data shows fluctuations, and your description of the 2016 loan categories lacks precision regarding the specific percentages. To improve, ensure you clearly highlight the most significant trends and make direct comparisons between the data sets rather than just listing them. The overview is present but could be more effectively integrated to provide a clearer summary of the main trends.
Coherence and Cohesion — Band 5.5
The response is organized into paragraphs, which helps the reader follow the structure. However, the use of cohesive devices is somewhat mechanical and occasionally inaccurate, such as 'Moving ahead' or 'To begin with', which do not always fit the context of a data report. The progression of ideas is generally logical, but the connection between sentences could be smoother. Referencing is sometimes unclear, particularly when discussing the charts, which makes the flow feel a bit disjointed. Improving the variety and accuracy of linking words will help achieve a more professional and cohesive tone.
Lexical Resource — Band 5.5
The vocabulary is adequate for the task but lacks the precision required for higher bands. There are several errors in word choice and form, such as 'base upon' instead of 'based on', 'name' instead of 'named', and 'porprotion' (spelling error). Phrases like 'are draw among' and 'where increase' indicate a limited control of collocations and verb forms. While you successfully use some topic-specific vocabulary like 'pie chart', 'tabular chart', and 'loans', the overall range is limited. Focusing on accurate word forms and more sophisticated reporting verbs would significantly enhance your score.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 5.5
The response contains a mix of simple and some complex sentence structures, but there are frequent grammatical errors that occasionally impede clarity. Examples include 'adult are most common visitors' (missing article/pluralization), 'total number of loans where increase' (incorrect verb tense/form), and 'it fluctuate' (subject-verb agreement). Punctuation is also inconsistent, such as the unnecessary comma in '20.,000'. While the meaning is generally understandable, the frequency of these errors prevents the response from reaching a higher band. You should focus on subject-verb agreement, article usage, and consistent verb tenses when describing past data.
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