Band 5.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer
Overall Band Score: 5.0 · Cambridge IELTS 20 · 2026-08-23
IELTS Writing Task 1 question
The charts below give information about a public library in a town called Little Chalfont.
Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
Student answer (Band 5.0)
The charts shows comparison of total loans availed by different age groups from 2007 to 2016 and first chart shows detailed loan category based on individual choices and second chart shows increase over the period of 2007 to 2016.
Loans availed during 2007 to 2016 has a gradual increase with lowest in 2007 and highest achieving the limit of 20000 loans in 2016.
Chart above shows largest number of childrens and adults 65 years and above with highest percentage of 38% each in category of children's fiction and Adults fiction following the second highest of 13% in adult non-fiction category.
During 2016 the lowest interest was shown in children's DVD'S loan with only 1%.
Overall it has been every age group choices that shows number of loans for this period of time.
There has been a slight dip in 2013 with almost 20000 loans but that was then followed an increase till 2016.
AI examiner evaluation
| Criterion | Band |
|---|---|
| Task Achievement / Task Response | 5.0 |
| Coherence and Cohesion | 5.0 |
| Lexical Resource | 5.0 |
| Grammatical Range and Accuracy | 5.0 |
| Overall | 5.0 |
Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 5.0
The response attempts to cover the main features of the charts, but the analysis is inconsistent and lacks clarity. While you identify the overall trend of loan increases and mention specific categories, the data interpretation is often confusing. For instance, the statement regarding '38% each' for children and adults is not clearly linked to the specific categories, and the description of the 2013 dip is inaccurate based on the provided data. To improve, ensure you clearly distinguish between the two charts and provide accurate, comparative data points rather than general statements. The overview is present but lacks the necessary precision to fully satisfy the task requirements.
Coherence and Cohesion — Band 5.0
The response is organized into short paragraphs, but the logical flow is weak. The transition between the two charts is abrupt, and the use of cohesive devices is limited and sometimes mechanical. For example, the phrase 'Chart above shows' is repetitive, and the connection between sentences is often disjointed, making it difficult for the reader to follow the progression of information. To improve, use a wider variety of linking words (e.g., 'furthermore', 'in contrast', 'consequently') and ensure that each paragraph has a clear focus, such as one for the trends over time and another for the category comparisons.
Lexical Resource — Band 5.0
The vocabulary is somewhat limited and repetitive. You rely on basic terms like 'shows' and 'increase' throughout the text. There are also issues with word choice and collocation, such as 'total loans availed' (a less natural phrasing) and 'lowest interest was shown in children's DVD'S loan'. To achieve a higher band, try to incorporate more precise academic vocabulary related to data description, such as 'fluctuated', 'accounted for', 'a significant proportion', or 'remained stable'. Additionally, ensure correct pluralization and avoid unnecessary apostrophes, such as in 'DVD'S'.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 5.0
There are frequent grammatical errors that occasionally impede the flow of the text. Subject-verb agreement is a recurring issue, such as 'The charts shows' and 'every age group choices that shows'. Sentence structure is often simplistic, and there are missing articles and prepositions throughout the response. For example, 'followed an increase' should be 'followed by an increase'. To improve, focus on mastering basic sentence construction, ensuring that subjects and verbs agree, and practicing the correct use of articles and prepositions in an academic context.
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