Band 6.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 6.0 · Cambridge IELTS 20 · 2026-08-24

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

The charts below give information about a public library in a town called Little Chalfont.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

 

Student answer (Band 6.0)

The charts illustrates the information about a public library name by Little Chalfont Library that includes age of library members, total percentage of loans based on category in the year 2016 and the total number of loans attained from 2007 to 2016.

To begin with, the pie chart depicts the information pertaining the age of library members in the year 2016 which displays the children is contributing to 22%, whereas young adults aged from 13-17 were 15% and the adults aged from 65 and over were also close to them with 12%, furthermore majority of the library members were adults aged from 18 to 64 years of age.

Having said that, the information regarding the total loans by category in 2016 were amongst the children's fiction and adult fiction was 38%, whereas the children's non-fiction was 6% and near double of it was adult non-fiction as 13%, children's DVDs was 1%, young adults and adult audio books were same with 2%.

Moreover, The line chart represents total number of loans from [redacted phone] where the x-axis illustrates year and y-axis depicts the number of loans. The chart shows a marginal change from 2007 with 15,000, then a significant rise with 4,000, and remains static in the next year showing a very minimal gradual rise, a slip can be seen from year 2012 to 2013 and then again back to 21,000.

Overall, it is clear from all perspectives, the minimum number of loans were taken in 2007 and maximum number of loans in 2016.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 6.0

The response covers all three charts provided. You have successfully identified the main features, such as the dominant age group (18-64) and the overall upward trend in loans. However, the analysis is somewhat descriptive rather than analytical. For instance, in the pie chart section, you list percentages without making sufficient comparisons between the categories. Furthermore, the description of the line chart is slightly inaccurate; you mention a 'significant rise with 4,000' and a 'slip' from 2012 to 2013, but the data points need to be interpreted more precisely to show the overall trend. To improve, focus on grouping data to highlight key trends and contrasts rather than listing figures sequentially.

Coherence and Cohesion — Band 6.0

The essay is logically organized into paragraphs, each focusing on a specific chart. You use some cohesive devices like 'To begin with,' 'Moreover,' and 'Overall,' which help guide the reader. However, some transitions are mechanical or slightly awkward, such as 'Having said that,' which is not the most appropriate choice for introducing a new set of data. Additionally, the referencing is sometimes unclear; for example, 'near double of it' is vague. Improving the variety of linking words and ensuring that pronouns clearly refer back to their antecedents would enhance the flow and coherence of your writing.

Lexical Resource — Band 6.0

You demonstrate an adequate range of vocabulary for the task, using terms like 'marginal change,' 'static,' and 'significant rise.' However, there are some inaccuracies in word choice and collocation. For example, 'the charts illustrates' (subject-verb agreement error) and 'name by Little Chalfont Library' are unnatural. You also rely on repetitive phrasing when describing the data. To reach a higher band, try to incorporate more precise vocabulary related to trends, such as 'fluctuated,' 'peaked,' or 'remained constant,' and ensure that your word forms are consistently accurate.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 5.5

The response contains a mix of simple and complex sentence structures. While you attempt complex sentences, there are frequent grammatical errors that occasionally distract the reader. Notable issues include subject-verb agreement ('The charts illustrates'), missing articles ('the information regarding the total loans'), and awkward phrasing ('the children is contributing to 22%'). Punctuation is also inconsistent, particularly with comma splices. To improve, focus on proofreading for basic grammatical accuracy, specifically ensuring that subjects and verbs agree and that your sentence boundaries are clearly marked with appropriate punctuation.

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