Band 5.5 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer
Overall Band Score: 5.5 · Cambridge IELTS 20 · 2026-08-24
IELTS Writing Task 1 question
The charts below give information about a public library in a town called Little Chalfont.
Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
Student answer (Band 5.5)
The pie chart illustrates the data regarding age of members, the table provides information on loan category in 2016 and the bar graph compares the amount of loan from 2007 to 2016.
Overall, adults were maximum participated members and the least were old ones. However, highest loaned category was children and adult friction and children DVDs followed downward trend. Whereas, the final year underwent a consistent and robust upward trend with peaked amount of loan and rest of the years experienced minor fluctuations.
Initially, children and adult above 65 were least participants with 12% and 15% participation as a member. Concurrently, adults from 13 to 17 years old played neutral character with 22% and adults from 18 to 64 years old mirrored this trend by hitting 51%. Furthermore, children and adult friction loan rose progressively to peak with 38% and adult non friction loan stood at 13% and children non friction loan plummeted sharply with 6 %. Moreover, young adult and audio books loan fell sharply to 2% and children DVDs faced downfall with 1%.
In addition, library loaned 15,000 in 2007 and in 2008 and 2009 climbed to 18,000 and substantial growth was observed in 2010, 2011, and
AI examiner evaluation
| Criterion | Band |
|---|---|
| Task Achievement / Task Response | 5.5 |
| Coherence and Cohesion | 5.5 |
| Lexical Resource | 5.5 |
| Grammatical Range and Accuracy | 5.5 |
| Overall | 5.5 |
Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 5.5
The response covers all three charts, but the analysis is inconsistent. While you identify some key features, the description of the table data is confusing, particularly the use of terms like 'adult friction' and 'children and adult friction,' which do not appear in the source data. The overview is present but lacks clarity, and the final paragraph is incomplete, cutting off mid-sentence. To improve, ensure you accurately interpret the labels provided in the charts and provide a complete, balanced summary of all data points without introducing inaccurate terminology.
Coherence and Cohesion — Band 5.5
The essay is organized into paragraphs, but the flow is hindered by awkward phrasing and incomplete sentences. While some cohesive devices are used, such as 'Initially' and 'Furthermore,' the logical progression is disrupted by the abrupt ending of the final paragraph. Referencing is sometimes unclear, making it difficult for the reader to follow the comparison of data. To reach a higher band, ensure that each paragraph is fully developed and that transitions between sentences are smooth and logically sound.
Lexical Resource — Band 5.5
The range of vocabulary is limited and includes several inaccurate word choices. Phrases like 'adult friction' and 'children and adult friction' are not appropriate for describing library loan categories. Additionally, 'played neutral character' is an unnatural collocation in this context. There is some attempt to use descriptive verbs like 'plummeted' and 'fluctuations,' but these are often applied to the wrong data points or used incorrectly. Focus on using precise terminology that directly reflects the labels provided in the charts.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 5.5
The response contains a mix of simple and complex sentence structures, but there are frequent grammatical errors that occasionally impede clarity. Examples include 'adults were maximum participated members' and 'children and adult above 65 were least participants.' There are also issues with article usage and subject-verb agreement. The incomplete sentence at the end of the response significantly impacts the overall grammatical control. To improve, focus on basic sentence construction and proofread to ensure all sentences are complete and grammatically accurate.
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