Band 4.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer
Overall Band Score: 4.0 · Cambridge IELTS 20 · 2026-08-25
IELTS Writing Task 1 question
The charts below give information about a public library in a town called Little Chalfont.
Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
Student answer (Band 4.0)
As looking the pie chart there are many people are coming almost all age in the year of 2016, Starting from children to adults , in little chalfont library , On the beside right a are seven types of loans category of 2016 data is available. And on the other bar chart is sharing the data total number of loans from 2007 to 2016.
In Pie chart major first 51% of Adults (Age : 18-64) are coming and them loan category is young adults 2% , Again in pai chart second 22% of members are children and the category of loans are children's fiction 38% , Childrem's non fiction 6% and Children DVDs 1% , Third young adults (Age: 13-17) 15% and the loans category is just one and 2% , fourth Adults (Age : 65 and above) 12% and Adult Fiction 38% , Adult non fiction 13 % and Adult audio books is 2%.
On the bar chart the lowest loans in 2007 is 15000 , in 2008 , 2009 and 2013 are same on -18000, 1010,2011,2012,2014,2015,2016 are almost same no grastical change is shown its around 20000.
AI examiner evaluation
| Criterion | Band |
|---|---|
| Task Achievement / Task Response | 4.0 |
| Coherence and Cohesion | 4.0 |
| Lexical Resource | 4.0 |
| Grammatical Range and Accuracy | 4.0 |
| Overall | 4.0 |
Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 4.0
The response attempts to cover the provided charts but fails to clearly distinguish between the two distinct datasets. The description of the pie chart is confusing, as it conflates age groups with loan categories in a way that makes the data difficult to follow. Furthermore, the summary of the bar chart is inaccurate; for example, stating that 2007-2016 figures are 'almost same' ignores the clear fluctuations shown in the data. The response lacks a clear overview or summary of the main trends, which is a requirement for Task 1. The information is presented in a fragmented manner, making it difficult for the reader to grasp the key features of the library usage.
Coherence and Cohesion — Band 4.0
The essay lacks logical progression. Paragraphing is present but does not effectively separate the two different charts, leading to a jumbled presentation of information. Cohesive devices are either missing or misused, such as the repetitive use of 'and' and 'in' to connect unrelated ideas. The referencing is unclear; for instance, the phrase 'On the beside right a are seven types' is grammatically broken and fails to guide the reader through the visual information. The overall structure is disjointed, and the lack of clear transitions between the pie chart data and the bar chart data hinders the flow of the response.
Lexical Resource — Band 4.0
The vocabulary is very limited and often inaccurate. There are frequent errors in word choice and spelling, such as 'grastical' (likely meaning 'drastic'), 'pai' (pie), and 'Childrem's'. The range of vocabulary is insufficient to describe trends or data points effectively. The student relies on basic, repetitive language and struggles to use appropriate terminology for describing charts, such as 'loan category' or 'members'. The lack of precision in describing the data makes the report difficult to interpret accurately.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 4.0
The response contains frequent grammatical errors that often impede communication. Sentence structures are consistently faulty, such as 'As looking the pie chart there are many people are coming' and 'On the other bar chart is sharing the data'. There is a lack of control over basic sentence construction, subject-verb agreement, and punctuation. Complex structures are attempted but are almost always inaccurate, leading to confusion. The frequent errors in tense and word order make the text difficult to read and understand, placing it firmly in the lower band range.
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