Band 6.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 6.0 · Cambridge IELTS 20 · 2026-08-25

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

The charts below give information about a public library in a town called Little Chalfont.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

 

Student answer (Band 6.0)

This pie chat illustrates the data ,that gives information about the public library in the towns called little Chalfont and also It is saying about the total number of loans in between the years of ([redacted phone])

Overall, working-age adults comprised the majority of library members in 2016, while fiction books for both children and adults dominated total loans. Additionally, total library borrowing experienced an overall upward trend over the nine-year period.

In 2016, adults aged 18 to 64 made up more than half of all library members at 51%, followed by children at 22%. Adults aged 65 and over accounted for 15%, while young adults (aged 13–17) represented the smallest demographic group at just 12%

Regarding total loans in 2016, fiction was by far the most popular choice, with children's fiction and adult fiction each accounting for 38% of all borrowings. Looking at overall trends between 2007 and 2016, the total number of loans rose consistently from approximately 15,000 items in 2007 to peak at over 20,000 in the early 2010s. Despite minor fluctuations around 2013, borrowings remained steady and closed at over 21,000 by 2016

Looking at overall trends between 2007 and 2016, the total number of loans rose consistently from approximately 15,000 items in 2007 to peak at over 20,000 in the early 2010s. Despite minor fluctuations around 2013, borrowings remained steady and closed at over 21,000 by 2016

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 6.0

The response successfully identifies the main features of the charts, including the demographic breakdown of library members and the trends in total loans. You have made relevant comparisons, such as contrasting the age groups and highlighting the dominance of fiction books. The overview is clear and provides a good summary of the data. However, the response contains a significant error: the final paragraph is a verbatim repetition of the previous paragraph. This repetition is a major oversight that affects the overall quality of the task completion. To improve, ensure you proofread your work to avoid such mechanical errors and focus on synthesizing the data rather than repeating it.

Coherence and Cohesion — Band 6.0

The essay is organized into logical paragraphs, with an introduction, an overview, and body paragraphs. Cohesive devices such as 'Overall,' 'Additionally,' and 'Regarding' are used to guide the reader. However, the repetition of the final paragraph creates a significant issue with flow and coherence, as it disrupts the logical progression of the text. While the individual paragraphs are internally coherent, the structural failure caused by the duplicated text prevents a higher score. Ensure that each paragraph adds new information and that the structure remains clean and professional throughout the entire response.

Lexical Resource — Band 6.0

You demonstrate an adequate range of vocabulary for the task, using terms like 'comprised,' 'demographic,' 'fluctuations,' and 'consistently.' This allows for a clear description of the data. There are some minor issues, such as 'pie chat' (should be 'pie chart') and 'It is saying about' (which is informal and imprecise). To reach a higher band, try to incorporate more precise academic collocations and avoid informal phrasing. The vocabulary is sufficient to convey the intended meaning, but it lacks the sophistication and precision required for the higher bands.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 6.0

The response uses a mix of simple and complex sentence structures, such as 'While the total library borrowing experienced an overall upward trend...' and 'Adults aged 18 to 64 made up more than half...'. There are some punctuation and grammatical errors, such as the unnecessary comma in 'data ,that' and the informal phrasing 'It is saying about'. While these errors do not impede communication, they are noticeable. The repetition of the final paragraph also reflects a lack of attention to detail in the final review of the text. Focusing on error-free complex sentences will help improve your score.

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