Band 5.5 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer
Overall Band Score: 5.5 · Cambridge IELTS 20 · 2026-08-25
IELTS Writing Task 1 question
The charts below give information about a public library in a town called Little Chalfont.
Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
Student answer (Band 5.5)
The charts illustrate the age groups of the members of Little Chalfont library , proportion of them selecting 7 different types of loans and total number of loans in the year 2016.
Overall, Majority of the library members are adults of age between 18 to 64. Most of the total members choose the children's fiction and adult fiction category. Where, children's DVD's are the least. The number of loans were the highest in 2016 with few fluctuations.
In the pie chart, half of the library members were above their teenage. 22% of the total members are the children. The remaining is composed by population of young adults and adults over 65 years. According to the table shown, Children's fiction and adult fiction covers equal percentage of 38%. With a huge different adult non-fiction is the second highest with 13%. Whereas, all other categories contain 6% or less.
The bar graph shows that there are few inconsistencies over the 9 year period. Number of loans were the lowest in the 2007 with around 1500 , later gradually increased to by 5000. Then slightly deceased in 2013 to 19000. Finally after it gained increase
AI examiner evaluation
| Criterion | Band |
|---|---|
| Task Achievement / Task Response | 5.5 |
| Coherence and Cohesion | 5.5 |
| Lexical Resource | 5.5 |
| Grammatical Range and Accuracy | 5.5 |
| Overall | 5.5 |
Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 5.5
You have successfully identified the main features of the charts, including the age distribution, loan categories, and the trend over time. However, the response is incomplete as the final sentence is cut off mid-thought ('Finally after it gained increase'), which prevents a full summary of the data. While you have made some comparisons, such as noting the equal percentage of fiction categories, the analysis of the bar graph is underdeveloped and lacks precision regarding the data points. To reach a higher band, ensure that all trends are fully described and that the conclusion or final summary is complete and coherent.
Coherence and Cohesion — Band 5.5
The essay is organized into logical paragraphs, which helps the reader follow the structure. However, the use of cohesive devices is somewhat mechanical and occasionally inaccurate. For example, the transition 'Where, children's DVD's are the least' is grammatically awkward and does not effectively link to the previous sentence. Additionally, the final paragraph lacks a clear concluding thought due to the incomplete sentence. Improving the variety of linking words and ensuring that each paragraph has a clear, finished progression would significantly enhance the flow of your writing.
Lexical Resource — Band 5.5
You have a sufficient range of vocabulary to convey the main points, such as 'proportion', 'fluctuations', and 'inconsistencies'. However, there are some issues with word choice and collocation. For instance, 'half of the library members were above their teenage' is unnatural; 'above teenage years' or 'adults' would be more precise. Additionally, 'With a huge different' is an incorrect collocation; 'With a significant difference' would be better. While your vocabulary is adequate for the task, you need to focus on more precise and natural phrasing to move into the higher bands.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 5.5
You demonstrate a mix of simple and complex sentence structures, but there are frequent errors in grammar and punctuation that occasionally impede clarity. Examples include 'Majority of the library members' (missing an article), 'children's DVD's' (incorrect pluralization), and 'slightly deceased' (likely a typo for 'decreased'). The final sentence is a fragment, which is a significant grammatical error. To improve, focus on subject-verb agreement, correct article usage, and ensuring that every sentence has a clear subject and predicate. Proofreading for basic spelling and punctuation errors will also help.
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