Band 5.5 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer
Overall Band Score: 5.5 · Cambridge IELTS 20 · 2026-08-26
IELTS Writing Task 1 question
The charts below give information about a public library in a town called Little Chalfont.
Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
Student answer (Band 5.5)
The figures illustrate the data of a public library in Little Chalfont.
Overall, the proportion of library members was mostly adults who were of aged 65 and over in 2016, and Children's fiction and adult fiction being on same level with the highest percentage by total loans category in 2016, also the year 2016 was also recorded as the year with the highest amount of loans from 2007.
The library members are most of adults that are 65 and over with covering 51%. Besides that children being on second. Total loan category has children's fiction on top with the 38% of rate along with adult fiction, while young adults being only 2%. The bar chart shows the highest grossing rate of loans by each year from 2007 to 2016, with 2016 being on top, and 2007 being lowest.
With this the year 2008 showed a sudden surge, and
AI examiner evaluation
| Criterion | Band |
|---|---|
| Task Achievement / Task Response | 5.0 |
| Coherence and Cohesion | 5.5 |
| Lexical Resource | 5.5 |
| Grammatical Range and Accuracy | 5.5 |
| Overall | 5.5 |
Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 5.0
The response fails to meet the minimum word count requirement of 150 words, which significantly impacts the task achievement. While the report attempts to cover the main features of the charts, the analysis is incomplete and ends abruptly mid-sentence. The overview is present but lacks clarity due to awkward phrasing. Key data points are mentioned, but the failure to complete the task and the lack of a cohesive summary of the trends mean that the information is not fully developed. To improve, ensure all parts of the prompt are addressed and that the response is of sufficient length to allow for a full explanation of the data.
Coherence and Cohesion — Band 5.5
The response is organised into paragraphs, but the logical flow is hindered by the incomplete nature of the text. Cohesive devices are used, such as 'Overall' and 'Besides that', but they are sometimes used mechanically or incorrectly. The referencing is occasionally unclear, and the abrupt ending prevents the development of a coherent conclusion. To improve, focus on using a wider range of linking words to connect ideas more fluidly and ensure that each paragraph has a clear, completed focus that contributes to the overall summary.
Lexical Resource — Band 5.5
The vocabulary is generally adequate for the task but lacks the precision and variety expected at higher bands. Phrases like 'mostly adults who were of aged 65' and 'highest grossing rate of loans' are slightly unnatural or inaccurate in this context. There is some repetition of basic terms like 'loans' and 'year'. To reach a higher band, try to incorporate more precise terminology related to data description, such as 'the majority of', 'a significant proportion', or 'fluctuated', and avoid awkward phrasing by checking for natural collocations.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 5.5
The response contains a mix of simple and some attempted complex structures, but there are frequent grammatical errors. Examples include 'Children's fiction and adult fiction being on same level' (missing articles and verb agreement) and 'with covering 51%' (incorrect prepositional usage). Punctuation is also inconsistent, particularly in the opening paragraph. While the meaning is generally understandable, these errors occur frequently and detract from the overall quality of the writing. Focusing on subject-verb agreement and correct article usage will help improve accuracy.
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