Band 6.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer
Overall Band Score: 6.0 · Cambridge IELTS 20 · 2026-08-27
IELTS Writing Task 1 question
The charts below give information about a public library in a town called Little Chalfont.
Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
Student answer (Band 6.0)
the charts provide information about the membership of the little Chalfont library by age group the distribution of total loans by category in 2016 and the total number of loans between 2007 and 2016
overall, adults aged 18-64made up the largest proportion of library members, while children's and adult fiction accounted for the highest percentages of loans. in addition, the total number of loans increased considerably over the period, despite some fluctuations .
in 2016, adults aged 18-64 represented 51%of all library members, making them by far the largest group. children accounted 22 % followed by young adults aged 13-17 at 15% . the smallest group was adult aged 65 and over at 12%.
regarding loans children fiction and adult fiction are the equally the most popular categories each accounting for 38 % of total loans. while children's non fiction makeup 6%, young adults and adult audio books made up 2%. while children's DVDs at just 1 %.
the total number of loans rose approximately 15,500in 2007 , to around 18500 in 2008 remain unchanged in 2009 . it then increased to about 20000in 2010 and peaked at approximately 20500in 2011 . after falling slightly in 2013 then recovered and reached roughly 20500 in 2016
AI examiner evaluation
| Criterion | Band |
|---|---|
| Task Achievement / Task Response | 6.5 |
| Coherence and Cohesion | 6.0 |
| Lexical Resource | 5.5 |
| Grammatical Range and Accuracy | 5.5 |
| Overall | 6.0 |
Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 6.5
The response covers all three charts effectively, identifying key trends and making relevant comparisons. You successfully highlighted the dominant age group (18-64) and the most popular loan categories (fiction). The trend description for the total loans is clear, noting the overall increase and the peak in 2011. However, the report could be improved by ensuring all data points are accurate; for instance, the description of the loan categories contains some minor inaccuracies regarding the percentages provided in the prompt. Overall, the response provides a clear overview and addresses the requirements of the task well.
Coherence and Cohesion — Band 6.0
The essay is logically organized into four distinct paragraphs: an introduction, an overview, and two body paragraphs focusing on membership and loan trends respectively. The progression of ideas is clear. You use some cohesive devices such as 'in addition', 'regarding', and 'while', which help the flow. However, the use of punctuation is inconsistent, particularly with missing spaces after periods and commas, which occasionally disrupts the reading flow. Improving the variety of linking words and ensuring consistent paragraph structure would help elevate this score further.
Lexical Resource — Band 5.5
You demonstrate an adequate range of vocabulary for the task, using terms like 'proportion', 'fluctuations', and 'categories' appropriately. There are some minor errors in word choice, such as 'children fiction' instead of 'children's fiction' and 'adult aged' instead of 'adults aged'. While the vocabulary is sufficient to convey the meaning clearly, it lacks the sophistication and precision required for higher bands. To improve, focus on using more precise collocations and ensuring correct word forms when describing data.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 5.5
The response uses a mix of simple and complex sentence structures. While the meaning is generally clear, there are frequent errors in punctuation, such as missing spaces after punctuation marks and inconsistent capitalization. There are also minor grammatical slips, such as 'children accounted 22 %' (missing 'for') and 'remain unchanged' (should be 'remained'). These errors do not impede communication, but they are frequent enough to prevent a higher score. Focusing on proofreading for basic grammatical accuracy and punctuation would significantly improve the quality of your writing.
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